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| mizz fyre |
  
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5 | 100.00% |
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09-09-05, 06:42 AM
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mizz fyre vs Def.
IP: 2E43 6BFE
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---Topical--- 16-30 lines No Crew Votes No Recycling No Biting Topic-Falling From Grace Minimum posts to vote: 300 Check in by: 09-12-05 at 06:42 AM Must drop verse in 4320 minutes after check in. Expired battle close - win |
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09-09-05, 06:48 AM
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IP: 0B65 656A
mizz fyre has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-09-05 06:48 AM.
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09-09-05, 06:53 AM
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IP: 2E43 6BFE
Def. has ACCEPTED this battle on 09-09-05 06:53 AM.
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09-10-05, 02:21 AM
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IP: 2E43 6BFE
Topic-Falling From Grace Aight Look, Grace is not an issue witch contridicts the sexual universe Superior feelings inside convulge before i become exumed first Real calm as a summers breeze at the height of loves epidemic Caressed my palm weak in the knees my heart willing to extend it Lessons of a love child un titled an grown sited my thrown Looking for a queen to build a happy home i find myself alone Cause in retrospect a suddle whistle recieves it all in its glory I mumble a soft breath from the chest in order to tell this story We'll just call her "grace" a beatiful girl looking for a solution It was my restitution to resolve her problems with a lovers contribution Options of suicide contemplation this is what two young lovers are facing Captions of happiness ina blissful kiss opening up without hesitation As the world revolves relationships grow tired old an weary But ones still bestowed in love as his become hateful an teary He cant picture a life without grace so he ponders in a somber mood Quiet a vast thresh hold of silence fills the room thinking how she so cruel If he cant have her nobody can its irrelevent that his emotions are takin over An emotional roller coaster he becomes irate not even sober he wants to hold her Actions become bolder the constant replaying of him her becomes In trenched He puts the gun to his head an starts thinking death maybe his last breath 'Just to get away become a lingering spirit an vanish without a trace Clicks the saftey off purposely he's falling......from.............grace
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09-11-05, 02:40 PM
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IP: A894 8139
Dear Grace,
I watch you sleeping, you smile gently at me and I softly weep Clutching your hand, I want to stay here all day, work can keep Pondering at why you did this, I can’t think, lights above flicker Doctors saying you got weeks but it seems times going quicker Its only me left here with you, your father abandoned his duty Had another life somewhere, but I couldn’t leave such a beauty Reminiscing about “those sweaters” the way you used to pretend That you were of an average size, but food you couldn’t befriend Why couldn’t you have discussed it with me? I was always there Why didn’t you share your secrets? Grace you know I really care Love mommy xx Dear my beautiful daughter Grace, its daddy, I want to say that I’m so sorry about departing But I had a new life to live and it was this I had to get to starting I was so unaware of the fact that you were causing yourself hurt by seeing what others were doing, you too had become a convert My daughter I could have protected you more, young and naïve We always told you, you’re beautiful, but that you didn’t believe Coming to your final hours, I’m wishing that for longer you’d last And hope I get to give you this personally, before you’ve passed A note by her bed reads….. Sleep tight, my gracious child, let god take you in an embrace Now that you’re at his place, nothing will fall from you grace
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09-11-05, 02:41 PM
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IP: A894 8139
nice verse............aight uppin for votes.........
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09-11-05, 02:46 PM
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A Life Of Chryme
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IP: 0825 899A
Voted For: mizz fyre
pollz............................................. ........j/p lol im voting  The reason why im voting for mizz fyre is becuz her creativity stuns me, it is very creative to the topic.She followed the concept well and stayed on track the whole time. as for def. your verse was pretty nice i felt it....just felt u lacked as great of creat\ivity structure...both had good structure and flow....not a problem in either verses vocab i felt mizz fyre and def. had equal vocab nothing to bicker about... just felt mizz fyre came stronger in her verse v/mizz fyre rtf on my recent battles thanks 1
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09-11-05, 03:04 PM
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IP: A894 8139
^^^thanx for voting.....uppin.....................
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09-12-05, 05:22 PM
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IP: 8D39 7F6A
uppin.............................................
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09-17-05, 02:22 PM
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IP: 63A5 025E
uppin this..........................................
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09-21-05, 07:10 AM
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IP: 92B6 AA88
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