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Old 07-13-06, 12:25 PM   #1
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Verses : Yvonne

Hooks : Yvonne (its my first time to eva sing and make a hook..yup!)

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Old 07-13-06, 01:07 PM   #2
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lmmfao...lmao @ me singing...


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Old 07-13-06, 03:25 PM   #3
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uppin for my girl....get out of ya beds freal ya'll stop sleeping on the finest chick in italy...
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Old 07-13-06, 03:46 PM   #4
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the singing reminded me of a pop singer from the 80s

not bad...But, I think it could have been more creative for the beat

ur flow is good here...vocal levels are good...But, more dubs would make your voice pop off...

pretty decent track here


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Old 07-13-06, 05:20 PM   #5
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haha thanx Gladiator

and thanx Q
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Old 07-13-06, 06:36 PM   #6
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Beats coo LMAO at the singing flopw sounds pretty coo spittin some sincere shit here vocals are good beat is kinda garbage to me to be honest but you flowed hella good too it this was a pretty decent track thou fo real
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Old 07-13-06, 07:15 PM   #7
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alright..returning the favor.........

the beat is nice..sounds like some shit that TLC would drop on...i'm liking it...
the hook is pretty cool i guess...not my type..but i still like it..
you come in real nice.....i'm loving the lyrics...that is where this track shines at....
your emotion is straight..but the quality is taking from it a bit....

overall a dope track 7.5/10
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Old 07-14-06, 02:20 AM   #9
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the hook is really good quality. its hard to sound good singing with a home studio tbh. verses were pretty sharp and constant with good lyrics. beat is so sad T-T like the end of spiderman movie. emotion is best in the song ~8.2/10
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Old 07-14-06, 07:34 AM   #10
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Aight,I Like This Beat....Hook I Think,Lol Singing Aint That Bad,Its Koo...Lil Off Tune...Verse...Flows Nice,Feelin It Like The Diversity,Feelin The Lyrics,I Can Relate To This So Word,Deliverys Nice,Quality Seems Better,But Still Room For Improvement....Presence Is Nice Feelin It...Seem Confident...Hooks On Again Haha....Verse 2 Word,Flows Better,Stays On Beat,Feelin The Emotion,Good Lyrics,Liking The Lyrics In The First Verse More,Feelin The Presence Seem Confident....Good Verse,Solid...Hook...Is This A Bridge???,Hook......Another Verse,Nope Just A Bridge Thing,Lol *Confused*

None The Less,Good Track Girl!!!:-D
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Old 07-15-06, 02:38 AM   #11
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lol..i just repeated some lines from the first verse and then the second verse...




thanx y'all drop ur linx....


still upping this!!!
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Old 07-15-06, 02:44 AM   #12
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i dont like the beat

singin is okay......you dont sound like you put enough emotion into your voice in the singing part

your verse comes in

its pretty good.....lyrics were meaningful

flow stays on point ...

I think u should up ur emotion a lil more and u'd be way better

this is pretty good.......just pick up a better mic

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Old 07-15-06, 08:03 AM   #13
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Ayo listenin' shorty...

Beat is nice...different...but nice...

Hook is pretty decent your singing isnt bad, if it was mixed better itd be better..

You can defintely feel what youre tryna say...emotion is good..

Lyrics definitely personal = meaningful like PT said....

yeah definitely the hook isnt bad...I actually like it jus need better quality...

Flow is good throughout the track...sumtimes fell off but mosta tha time stayed up...

nice track shorty, keep em coming yvonne, 1
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Old 07-15-06, 12:18 PM   #14
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Ah'ight beat is unique but good...you got a simple but efective flow the concept is the true appeal of this track becuz you can tell you coming real a real place...delivery could be a bit better, more emotion an alil better pronounciation in spots would help...also a stronger mix to bring ya vocals out more cuz also sum lines was kinda muddy sounding certain instruments of the beat was clashing with the vocal frequencies an mudding it up...the hook was ah'ight it was kinda low but the harmony of it wasn't bad jus wasn't that catchy....but overall a very good track with strong content....keep it up...1

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Old 07-15-06, 12:52 PM   #15
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Thanx PT


Thanx Kon

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Thank You Triple



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