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06-03-05, 08:19 AM
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I have a lot to learn...
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The Inner Workings of Revenge
IP: 3374 00C5
Without them who am I? Without her who am I? Without them where will I go? Without them what will I do? It has been 10 years. Imagine a flame scorching your organs, singeing your heart, and no matter what, how, when, why, it wont leave you Through the rain the flame burns Through the dark the flame gives light Is it even a flame? Or is it a fire? Or is it a fire storm? It came from hell, no doubt, Satan's door into my soul was unlocked. 10 years ago........ So what? I'll do the same to them. Satan's door won't open into a hallway or closet It will open and reveal a vast dome, or better yet, it will lead outside Fires can spread you know. The fire in my soul was blown by a wind 10 years ago Spread from the door, to the heart, to the mind... And then to the body... From the body to the extremeties, the hands. I was unaware my hands were already placed Placed around the neck of the one who opened the door I dont care who loves him, he took love from me I hold the key to their gateways, And I opened them when I took his life. So now hell, the mainframe of the firestorm has new exits From the door to the soul to the mind To their hands, to their knives, to my heart. But you know what? That fire was so hot, it scorched me white. That fire was so hot, it collapsed the door in my soul Now I know where I am, and who I am with Making love and playing with them under cerulean skies...
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06-03-05, 10:04 AM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 7086 B555
OOOOOOOOOOOOO this is good poem here. Alright i like your approach in this, The concept was nice. Uppp on the vocab. The imaginary of this piece was good, the emotion of this piece was also good. The best aspect in this poem was the concept and the approach you took. I had to re-read it to get the concept but i got it. This is a good poem no doubt.
return a favor Leave a feed in my OM called "The monster within" the link in sig........ A~M.
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06-12-05, 05:04 AM
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I have a lot to learn...
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IP: 3374 00C5
uppin and all that jazz...
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06-13-05, 10:58 PM
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Blow Me
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IP: 963B DD50
i was really feeling this piece.. i dont know what drove u to write this.. but it was very beautiful.. in an odd sort of way.. good job.. and keep it up..
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06-14-05, 01:26 PM
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IP: 3240 794D
I've had no idea you were a good poet.A beautiful poem here.
and if I'm not mistaken the flame represented anger? And I'm sure poetry reflects on your music.So props on this. I'll be sure to read some more of your work in the future. pc |
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06-14-05, 02:49 PM
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†•The Council Nigga •†
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IP: B91A F28C
i was really feeling this peice right here. the vocab was on and the emotion was there. This peice was deep atleast to me. i really enjoyed reading this that i actually read it 2-3 times over again and i found new stuff and meaning each time i read it..keep up the good work nigga. -1 |
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06-14-05, 07:04 PM
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Banned: Biting
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IP: C1B3 89A4
well, this was very deep. you showed so much good emotion bieng designed and displayed here. dont really have that much time to leave such intentelctualy feed bcuz im in a tourny rite now so ill get at you with better feed at a later date.
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06-15-05, 06:25 PM
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<<-Carpe Noctum->>
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IP: 0825 899A
Good poem OMB, don't think i ever read anything like this from you, or if you ever dropped a poem in here before, i liked the emotion in this and the emphasis on the flame/fire concept, although it is a deep piece to us as readers, to you it is somewhat of unleashing a truth in your feelings, but well done and your style is similiar to early Edgar Allen Poe works with the way it is written and how it flowed. nice job.1
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