check in and we will both start

ok checkin in blind in 20............................

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aight.

Holmes got no chance,there aint no stoppin me,
it's like i got hotels on every property in monopoly,
I own the board, the only way you win is copy me,
rhymes are writtin sloppily and every punch has a flaw,
one punch from me have you eatin lunch through a straw,
this kid's gotta tattoo that says "country is raw,"
my styles eclipse you like the sun does the moon,
this chump's a chimp, i heard his mom's a baboon,
Holmes,I think it's a little too soon to come out your cacoon,
Just like a balloon this kid's full of hot air,
reachin and grabbin for skills that aren't there,
you know im better and you whine it's not fair,
My shit's more intelligentual than a college thesis,
i shatter your rep......now you can pick up the pieces....

The opener was a kick ass meta. I liked how tactixx worked in triplets because it shows that he actually has to have two good lines in a row and then he hits with the final blow each time. The closer was pretty good as well. the one thing wrong was the tattoo line. it seemed out of place, but i liked the 'through a straw' line.

Holmes was much less complex and more generic that tactixx. he tried to use played gay stuff, and that's getting old.

Tactixx took this one. VOTE; TACTIXX

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Only thing you'll get out of this is a big fat sonning..
Cos only Tactixx you got is "Shit Verses for Dummies"..
Shit I just won it, think you can handle me? Think again..
We know you aint no rapper cos ur rhymes all have "simple plans"..
You aint no thuggie just a druggie cos you OD'd on whackness..
Fuck the EC, head to wackness rehab, you fuckin addict..
And that's it, forget your pathetic lyrics, quit battlin..
You should be in bed with your boyfriend comittin the faggot sin..
Fuck it, I already won, I don't even need a closer..
Cos the lyricism officer just fuckin pulled you over..

That's all folks..

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My shit's more intelligentual than a college thesis,<-------typo
intelligentual=intellectual

Blah...uppin once but i got to get off..ill peep this later and see whatsup

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aight bet...see ya around.....

Uppin......(1)

can i get some input on this shit???
uppin.... leave a link and ill check it out

tactixx =

Holmes got no chance,there aint no stoppin me,
it's like i got hotels on every property in monopoly,
I own the board, the only way you win is copy me,
played line
rhymes are writtin sloppily and every punch has a flaw,
one punch from me have you eatin lunch through a straw,
this kid's gotta tattoo that says "country is raw,"
ok straw line no point in tattoo 1 tho.
my styles eclipse you like the sun does the moon,
this chump's a chimp, i heard his mom's a baboon,
Holmes,I think it's a little too soon to come out your cacoon,
ok, passable
Just like a balloon this kid's full of hot air,
reachin and grabbin for skills that aren't there,
you know im better and you whine it's not fair,
bla
My shit's more intelligentual than a college thesis
shatter your rep......now you can pick up the pieces
rubbish finish

holmes =

Only thing you'll get out of this is a big fat sonning..
Cos only Tactixx you got is "Shit Verses for Dummies"..
ok opener
Shit I just won it, think you can handle me? Think again..
We know you aint no rapper cos ur rhymes all have "simple plans"..
rubbish didnt rhyme
You aint no thuggie just a druggie cos you OD'd on whackness..
Fuck the EC, head to wackness rehab, you fuckin addict..
shockin i thought you were better than this
And that's it, forget your pathetic lyrics, quit battlin..
You should be in bed with your boyfriend comittin the faggot sin..
ok
Fuck it, I already won, I don't even need a closer..
Cos the lyricism officer just fuckin pulled you over
better than his closer

ok flow goes to tactixx and structur to holmes, punches go to tactixx, but both of ya spits were wack. holmes, soory dogg thought you were better than this.

vote = tactixx < overall

blah this was off the top of my head, perhaps that was my mistake..

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opener:tactixx had an okay opener, the multiples in the second line definetely helped.
holmes opener was pretty good, structure was just a little off, but the punch was funny,but it was also played....::holmes jr::


punchlines:holmes had a lot of simple punches, there really wasn't anything new done here.
tactixx did just a little better, the only one I wish would've been said was the "his moms a baboon" tactixx came out on top,just on top though...
::tactixx::

structure: tactixx had all the structure here, makin' his easier to read than holmes jr's.

wordplay:nobody really had any..too bad.

multiples:tactixx only had some in the first part of his verse....
holmes tried in the middle of his verse, but came up short here.::tactixx::

closer:holmes closer started out ayite, but the second half was obvious.I knew it was coming..
tactixx had it here...his closer was borderline complex, mixed with a personal, and a punchline....tactixx


vote TACTIXX.... now peep my sig..then vote on my shit....

this chump's a chimp, i heard his mom's a baboon,
thanx heh....i know i was shakin my head at that line as i typed it...i knew it sucked,heh