dedicated to the soultress

Grenades made serenade shades of grades that evades to propel a blaze/
And engrave a purple haze to portray a maze the mass fade to last days/
self raised in a scribbled page to be simply amazed or be a empty grave/
backed to knowing I breed disgrace tips that slowly it feeds the matrix/
I up the chips and switch a simple flip with gentle hits and try to forget/
the clinging to a physical fiening when bringing the individual meaning/
the mental cleaning switch’s this deadmans gibberish while screaming/
back in a maze I stack in waves in younger age I’d just attack out of rage/
so turn the page if mothering suffering for I exist in endless vengeance/
when I spit I spit with a clinched fist as disaster takes my bastard face/
one last question being every night I’m dreaming people aren’t demons/
why should ignorance par take a far place as arrogance would start race/
to employ a convoy a search and destroy then to toy beliefs like decoys/
ecstasy oversees a void so drop the e from my name watch me bring joy/
lower your voice with your drug of choice as words burn the link to think/
so bleed obsolete so weak that after a cold week gods raise like the Greek/
when my shits weak I’m stuck back in shits creek baffled without paddle/
easily dismantle self as a tear appears in fear when the mirror battles help/
life brings something so empty that its bleeding the weakening of destiny/
pause ruley we are what we are what’s lacked so funny/
cause truly we are what we are when its backed by money/

yo that shit is raw as hell i like that piece keep writin i look forward to more. one love

Have you been on here before? Or are you a new member?

Cos i can't seem to remember ya...and this was another exceptional piece...from what seems, an exceptional poet...

I'd say this is best when done on open mic (i.e. verbal, rather than written...sorry if that sounds patronising...)...

..but that's not to say it aint good in writing...well more than good...i mean it's so hard to depict emotions so raw and powerful in the style you did....well it is....as long as there's a couple of strong, outstanding words every three lines....but you elevated to a level above that...i mean it actually had a lot of substance...and a lot of depth...and to tell ya the truth...quite original too....(the 'topic' that is)...

...it hit kind of hard and deep, for reasons beyond explanation (or maybe i just don't want to tell...cos it's so fuked up!)...but yeah, i mean it's got some real personal kind of depth to it with me....which may sound kind of weird...no, may sound weird, full stop (without the kind)....pah!...either way, i dannae care...

...anyway....very nice piece...respect...

yeah ive written in here before, but under another name. but appreciatting ya both for peeping my stuff. and varentao i am flipping this into audio, so good guess.

peace
ps. thank you for the saying you thought this was ooriginal. ifeel like ive accomplished something. bIG THanKs

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