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05-26-03, 06:18 PM | #1 | |||||||
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Being With You
IP: B967 916C
As I sail with you across the finest oceans
On a way to find the key to our emotions Together we will move the clouds to brighter days Some people question what I say Tried to part our love's play But I know this love between us is growing stronger You can call me whenever from wherever Just remember that I'll be there Through all the stormy weather Us parted never No we'll be together Forever. |
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05-26-03, 06:19 PM | #2 | |||||||
Eternal
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IP: B967 916C
Well? anyone think it's worth writin' for?
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05-26-03, 06:21 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
Another nice one from you...this one was a bit different than the rest of the stuff you write...it flowed a little ruff...but it was good all in all...keep it up...
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05-26-03, 06:23 PM | #4 | |||||||
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IP: B967 916C
Thanks again, and your company has been great! There's no 1 else in the damn forum!
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05-26-03, 06:46 PM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: 4577 CD9A
lol....Well, your damn good. Ive enjoyed your company too.
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05-26-03, 07:11 PM | #6 | ||||||
Light Weight
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IP: 640C 3FBD
This was a nice little piece. Only problem I had with it was the flow, like twiztid said, but other than that, it wasn't bad. Not really much else to say. I'll go peep your other stuff real quick.
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05-27-03, 09:53 AM | #7 | |||||||
Eternal
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IP: 34A7 D1BF
Thanks
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