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Old 05-26-03, 06:18 PM   #1
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As I sail with you across the finest oceans
On a way to find the key to our emotions
Together we will move the clouds to brighter days
Some people question what I say
Tried to part our love's play
But I know this love between us is growing stronger
You can call me whenever from wherever
Just remember that
I'll be there
Through all the stormy weather
Us parted never
No we'll be together
Forever.
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Old 05-26-03, 06:19 PM   #2
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Well? anyone think it's worth writin' for?
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Old 05-26-03, 06:21 PM   #3
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Another nice one from you...this one was a bit different than the rest of the stuff you write...it flowed a little ruff...but it was good all in all...keep it up...
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Old 05-26-03, 06:23 PM   #4
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Thanks again, and your company has been great! There's no 1 else in the damn forum!
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Old 05-26-03, 06:46 PM   #5
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lol....Well, your damn good. Ive enjoyed your company too.
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Old 05-26-03, 07:11 PM   #6
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This was a nice little piece. Only problem I had with it was the flow, like twiztid said, but other than that, it wasn't bad. Not really much else to say. I'll go peep your other stuff real quick.
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Old 05-27-03, 09:53 AM   #7
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Thanks
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