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The Music

I dont know wasn't feeling it the way it was put together isn't too catchy to me, the beat was cool just the production wasn't too tight. Flow was ok but didn't really suit your delivery, I think the flow you chose doesn't even go with the beat smoothly. Course was basic, should switched it up a bit maybe throw some heys and ows in the background, make it lifer and tighten up any loose spots. Not saying it sucks, Im prolly just really picky, Im sure people will dig it though.

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It's ok to make money, Legit or illegal...
But it's treason when you turn your back on your people.

mix the hook bettter, more lows, more layers. and your lacking swagger it seems like you dont feel what your sayin...not like you did on your heartbreak songs....make me believe that your seeing this freak and you really wunna fuck...dont just say it mean it...the sound isnt bad just unbelieveable, sorry

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I'm a bit too lazy to really break it all down but here are a few things.

Your voice is much too loud and muddy in the intro.

You sound funny when you say "shawty". It doesn't sound natural at all. It really sounds like you're trying too hard to say it like that. Let it come out naturally like you're in a real convo.

The flow on the second verse is much better than the first. The first is boring.

Voice on the outro is muddy too.

And chorus is bland...add something to it.

whatt is that beattt. lol wil lfeed soon.
but i have that beat and can't find it. lol

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