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Old 01-28-04, 01:30 PM   #1
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[Wk1]Mentill vs Big EZ

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Verses Due: Tuesday February 3rd, 2004
Voting Ends: Saturday February 9th, 2004

Topic: Ease The Pain
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Old 01-28-04, 02:14 PM   #2
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Old 01-28-04, 04:30 PM   #3
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Heh ... Dope topic ... Im here
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Old 01-30-04, 04:32 PM   #4
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None shall presume to fly, under pain of death. --Addison.


My millitry made mind...........Makes me insane
Wish i cud wash it 'way with rain.......Ease my pain
Months spent away...........From my imedeate Family
Un-happily acting my emotions......Hiding my Insanity
Plains of raw flesh...........How many here were hurt
Teeth marks from ethnic war....Heads crushed on curbs
Many styles of Hardship....Some Love...Some Physical
My Pain has recently De-Creased......Is this a Myricle?
I turn my cheek at Horrid Pictures.....Mentors of Torture
My heart torn out from my chest....Blasted in a Mortar
The many ways how we feel pain.....Exampled in my life
I wonder how we all differ...Would they sample my strife
I gather feelings of past results....Scars on my anatomy
But life without experiences..........Must be a Catastrphy
I Fantasticly anounce a State........A loss of happy love
Why am i punished for a crime....That i'm Innocent of
I ponder theories of staying safe.....Im sick of being hurt
Why do my emotion get inverted....Its Happyness i assert
Two rongs dont make a right...Its my second time of torment
Im entitled to out emotions...Empty my heart of its contents
If its a Loved one you have lost..Or a Injury you have gained
It takes more than modern medicine..To ease todays pain



Interpose, on pain of my displeasure. --Dryden.

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Old 02-02-04, 07:04 PM   #5
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Eh due date is tomorrow .. But I'll key sumthin' up right now .. Ease The Pain .. Hmm

Dead flat, layed out, my blood covers the floor
Life liquid runnin' out, I don't want this no more
Im sore, pain stricken, to much pride for me 2 cry
I once thought I had too much life for me 2 die
Im pleadin' "why?" but nobody can hear me
Yet Im surrounded by people, they're juss staring
Uncaring, sad, happy, each showin' their own emotions
Was engulfed in silence, till the big one had spoken
My flesh open, Im hopin' the end is near
Cuz Im here, wishin' I could befriend a tear
Trapped behind fear and anxiety, it's strange
Shit doesn't ever really change, why did it have to rain?
Covered in pain, I can hear heaven's angel's callin'
I was fallin', now it seems that the fall started stallin'
The face of death is appalin', that's why I hate autumn
I went from hoppin, to rottin' on rock a bottom
"We got 'em!" yelled the large man ..
as he screamed his companions name
So much for this deer's dear last stand
Now I wish they'd hurry up and ease the pain
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Old 02-06-04, 01:50 PM   #6
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Old 02-06-04, 02:08 PM   #7
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Both pieces were well written.. But i got to go with EZ on this one.. Just felt his verse flowed a little better & his content was a little more entertaining.. Mentill yours was pretty nice too, but i felt EZ out did you by a little.

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Old 02-07-04, 08:52 AM   #8
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Both had good verses. but Bigg E Z had a very well put out verse. It had good imagry emotion and complex detail. Mentill you had a good verse also but I felt some lines seemed rushed...but over all close battle.

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Old 02-07-04, 01:52 PM   #9
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good battle.......verses could have been longer.....mentill......why did you key?......tha breakdown:

Big E.Z. rhyme scheme- 7, story- 8, flow- 7, total- 22

nyce drop............really felt tha emotion (extremely deep), flow was ok...........could have been longer to show better imagery

Mentill- rhyme scheme- 7.5, story-7, flow-7.5, total-21.5

this was a close battle, why didnt you take more time mentill...............you could've ripped it, i really lyked tha first half of your verse..........but afta that it just fell off, you could have elaborated and made it longer

my vote goes to Big E.Z...........no hard feelins, may tha best man win, peace, 1

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Old 02-07-04, 04:19 PM   #10
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Pretty Nice Battle On Both Ends. Both Came With Decent Concepts And Had Nice Imagery. Bigg's Verse Just Seemed To Get Me Wanting To Read On That Little Bit More, It All Flowed Together Well, Not Brilliant, But Good None The Less. MeNTiLL Came Nice, Just Lacked A Bit In The Enjoyment Factor.

Good Battle Fella's.

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Old 02-07-04, 06:53 PM   #11
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Old 02-07-04, 11:33 PM   #12
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i thought both pieces approached the topic well, and had great content. both had a good flow and rhyme scheme, but i felt that EZ's piece had a little more emotion and better content in it. found it a bit more interesting. thou i liked mentill's rhyme scheme better my vote goes to EZ.

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Old 02-08-04, 09:23 AM   #13
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Old 02-09-04, 01:53 AM   #14
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Bigg wins
 
 


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