Well now that its all over with im gonna be needin/
A bat so I can hit you with it, you’ll be bleedin/.
Man yer not hot you’ve been feedin off my shit/
So stop before I hafe to merk you to make you quit/.
Me n yer gurl up on the spot of the boogie down/
You see me n her getting frisky who new you broke out with a frown/.
That’s what happens when you feed off (B-R-O-T-H-A-P-A-R-A)/(spelled out)
Me and only me will be the one to drop you down anyway/.
I spit out harder punches everytime we battle/
So dont get scared cuz im gonna be up with the fame moven into seattle/.

Now I’ll be the one stealin you’re bitchs cuz that’s how I roll/
Don’t talk to me like you know the shits a deal cuz you remind me of a troll/.
Now listen ill be up not back on the lows/
Cuz im down with your bitches and hoes/.
I could take them with ease drop you down with some breeze/
You would be down on yer knees, and cryin becuz I made you freeze/.
Now here we go to the slice board to chop some head/
Your out headless bleedin now your dead/.

yo uppin this shit

Work on
structure make it more realistic like you were really rapping
Vocab.. is too basic.. add a few fancy word's in.. but dont try being a nerd.
Multi's increase your flow sometime's put a few of them
.. and rhyme scheme

It was`nt worth reading 4/10.

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