....i call this piece Betrayal...yall tell me what u think.......



as i walk this long path of destruction too deep for many......
i can see plenty of demons wanting to creep in me.....
infest me with there knowledge and betray my own kind.....
the flames are aimed at my soul and mind....
cant give up yet i gotta fight them off stay bold and till my demise.....
yet too many sins ive commited and im still young with age.....
a prayer to speak but never do....
....seems im gettin closer to hells gates....
every sin i create is the more i betray....
my rightful father above who gave me plenty....
.....since the day i was made.....
so whats pushing me to this side...
.... as pitch black as underground caves....
could it be my greed for power...
.....my hunger to defeat my prey....
could it be the obsessive lust of this world...
.... effecting my brains waves....
im a walking time bomb set to blow with rage any day....
in every way and every step my sin is put together....
i just cant win to be accepted without sin im still falling....
..... slowly floating closer to grounds like a torn eagles feather.....
im trying to do good but whos behind me telling me evils better....
so its a clash between light and dark.....
...... lethal blades verses stone black hearts....
i remain stuck in the middle...
..... drowning in a bloody mess of body parts....
as my mind switches its loyalty...
.... from righteous one to unnatural advocate....
im starting to slip away from bible readings....
..... never seeing the priest to repent....
i dont wanna cease to exist....
..... only for the wrong doings of the beast with a triple six....
i cant run or hide from my betrayal or my convicted sins...
ive betrayed the lord by being wicked..
.... how can i ever be forgiven....
why am i even still liven....
..... i should be dead just for writing this written!....



my links..........

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243751
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=243657

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uppin on this........would like some good feedback....~1~

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Yeah dude this was real nice.
But honest the flow was hard to read at time man.
The emotion had potential but you didnt grow on it that much.
The imagery was nice and straightforward
so goof peice keep writing man,

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War|Pestilence|
Death|Famine|

|Atrocious|
|Corruptive|Depraved|
|Heinous|Malevolent|Sinister|

That's pretty fucking evil to me.....