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10-10-03, 10:10 PM | #1 | ||||||
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I See You Girl . . .
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I See You Girl, Even Though You Low Key . . .
I'm Lonely, And Want You As My One And Only . . . You Mean So Much, But Say So Little . . . A Rock And A Hard Place, With Me In The Middle . . . You Remain A Riddle, So Answer The Mystery . . . All Them Other Niggas, Leave Them As History . . . Im Drowning In Misery, So Give Me This Present . . . Your Hand, In Mine, Now Isnt This Pleasant ? ? I Cant Figure Out Your Brain Though, It Remains So . . . This Pain Yo, Is Driving Me Insane Slow . . . This Chance Wont Pass Me, I Wont Miss It . . . Because I Instantly Light Up When You Visit . . . So Please Just Come And Let Me Hold You Tight . . . Because Ma, Its Gon Be Awfully Cold Tonight . . . |
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10-10-03, 11:41 PM | #2 | ||||||
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im lovin that verse man, thats amazing...plus i can relate to it also...very nice good flow and multis all over the place...
awesome verse keep doing your thing |
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10-11-03, 12:07 AM | #3 | ||||||
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Thanx For The Reply, Uppin For Some More Tonight . . .
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10-11-03, 12:21 AM | #4 | ||||||
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Good shit here. Very good flow, awsome word placement. I felt it to. you have a talent so plant it and let it grow. spect JT
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10-11-03, 12:25 AM | #5 | ||||||
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Nice drop existance. This will be one to remember for a while to come. Keep the pieces comin. Look forward to reading more from you.
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10-11-03, 01:15 AM | #6 | ||||||
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Very grabbing. I understand totally.
Nice work!!!!!!! |
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10-11-03, 09:48 AM | #7 | ||||||
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Thanx For The Replies, Uppin For More
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10-11-03, 07:44 PM | #8 | |||||||
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good verse, nice wordplay it was a basic read but flowed smoothly an thats wut really caught my eye you stood out in this even though it was pretty simple...8 /10...good spit...peep myn...Faith..peace
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10-11-03, 11:21 PM | #9 | ||||||
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Good stuff man i feel like that some times and can relate to that i new at poetry im a rapper and startin to like poetry more but i really am lookin forward to hearin some more of your studd man good verse and goot multis
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10-12-03, 11:25 AM | #10 | ||||||
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Writing Poetry Makes Writing Tracks Easier . . . At Least For Me . . .
Thanks For The Replies, Uppin For More . . . |
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10-13-03, 01:24 PM | #11 | |||||||
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short
yet great i loved the easy read this poem gave off it was simple from line one to the end but yet it held such a powerful impact was really wonderful to read such a great peice\ i loved this line: This Pain Yo, Is Driving Me Insane Slow altho youe rpeice was more on an open mic tip ( i felt it was still a grace to the poetry room |
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10-13-03, 01:28 PM | #12 | ||||||
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a lovely heartfelt poem. morw lads should write letters like that to girls they love, the world would be a better place, if its from the heart, then i sincerly hope you get your girl...peace and love to you, this was a good, simple drop but i felt it.
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10-14-03, 08:20 PM | #13 | ||||||
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What a nice read. Very very nice read. It was easy to follow and just oozed with a chilled yet emotionally carseesing atmosphere.
Simple. Well compressed into not too many words. That's a difficult thing to do. ...resp... |
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10-15-03, 03:27 PM | #14 | |||||||
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nice piece dawg... flowed perfectly plus you used the right vocab, short but tight.
Keep droppin, I was feelin this to the fullest peace |
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10-17-03, 01:49 PM | #15 | ||||||
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Good Looks On The Replies, Uppin For More
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