MeNtiLL
the populous.

Lookin thru my window I see why I tend to smoke tha endo
And juss sit here goin' mental yellin' at my new nintendo
When it acts up, I wanna rap but parents say I need a back up
Inspiration for me? There's a lack of, But I don't wanna pack up
And juss leave, Cuz for me I see I wanna be an emcee
Whether tha path is friendly or not it seems tempting
To quit, FUCK! SHIT! And Im always wonderin' why it's rainin
Got no job, education, or trainin', Parents always complain
Talkin bout, MeNTiLL U need to grow up get a life
Yea right. Get a job? Go to school? Find a bitch to be my wife?
It's not for me, Ur not stoppin me from playin' monopoly
I was never good at mathmatics or writin hypothesis
That's tha main reason Im freezin juss sittin on my bed breathin
Words wit sum sort of meanin, While trapped in tha everlastin season
Of rain, Pain, Stains, Frames of broken fantasied but who's to blaim?
Me? Or tha same people that claim to have given me my name?
Im not sure. Juss tryna escape from these locked doors
See tha American Dream But exactly who is tha plot for?
Is it writtin for a black man runnin who has no money
One who grew to hate Santa along wit tha Easter Bunny
And they tell me imaginations run high. It's funny
Im tired of girls askin their little friends, Why's he so ugly
And U say sumone loves me? I think not
Tha things that I think rot so I write words in ink blots
To express myself and help myself put tha gun away and not run away
It's rainin' inside but Im hopin' to get out to that sunny day

G. Hod
the reformer.

The sun shines, regrettably -- wasted, as it beats on their hair
Masses throw it out, hoping to experience deceit and despair
"Fight it," says instinct. . Ignored, as the masses' head rears foward
I swear, this is the next epidemic -- Paralyzed, as death veers toward
Fuck the analogy; a full glass comes never, now it pulls crass together
Optimism out the window. . Education starts it, our schools pass endeavors..
as if they hold no weight; Ruled by majority, our snide sensors tame it (endeavor)
What happened to art-forms? "Man v. Beast" now provides entertainment
The present holds the future. . Very few vigilantes compress my qualms
Depression's an epidemic -- Soon, Red Cross will drop anti-depressant bombs
I don't mean to whine. . The back-packers' expectations touch deranged fountains
But my mind will wonder out-of-range, in exploration of the brain's mountains
It's got the wealth addicted. . Everyone's blue, myself -- exquisite
We act as if the experts don't know this "disease" is self-inflicted
G. and Mentill -- It's too easy, we've done spun minds together
But, believe it, my audience. . Realize that the sun shines forever

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DAMNIT I LOVE IT
this is my kind of open mic... now to disect

It's not for me, Ur not stoppin me from playin' monopoly

loved the line... all your internal rhymes were great, u probably averaged 4 rhymes per line (im guessing) which is good by my book. The approach was nice, and you handled it well. it felt like you were over the phone talking to me about it...

part 2

i didnt totally get what you were saying. the approach seemed like a parent giving his child a speech... MeN being the child (that makes this whole thing all the better) the ending was great

But, believe it, my audience. . Realize that the sun shines forever

i think im gonna cry

10/10, do it again

This shit came out to be stupid dope fresh G. Hod...Im likin' it...We gonna have to do anutha collab sumtime....And people give us sum real replies...Peace

this was a damn good open mic...i liked tha whole thing...both mentill's and g. hod's verses was good...nice shit...

keep it up...

we're back

To quit, FUCK! SHIT! And Im always wonderin' why it's rainin
Got no job, education, or trainin', Parents always complain

aint that the truth...feeling it fellas...you both portrayed your
thought's very well, strong writers voice throughout the piece..
also mentills heavy use of internals added a little kick to his
rhyme scheme, ill flow....G hod came solid on every aspect of his
verse...much props.

that's wat we need right there, that was some hard shit, makes u wanna just think about it all day, tha whole topic and tha two views gave tha topic an even more powerful and dynamic feeling two it

to tha mechanics, nice multis, good flow, easy to read and understand

overall nice drop

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i liked this a lot...

i'd say a lot more but you can't pronounce feelings...


peace

props and respect

That was great !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
U guys should colab a lot more. Different styles of writing that mathced up perfectly for this piece. I know I'm not just speaking for myself when I say " U guys should do more of this"


PEACE~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~>

Uppin for sum more replies...Peace

i love it now y cant i think of shit that good
damn

Uppin for sum more replies...No more one liners tho....Peace

YO YOU HAD A GREAT CONCEPT.UTALIZED SIMPLE TEXT TO MAKE IT FIT RIGHT.AND YOU USED GRAPHIC WORDS TO PAINT THE PICTURE WE CAN RELATE TO.
G~HOD POPPED IT OFF JUST AS ILL LYRICAL CONTENT WOWED ME A LIL AND THAT AINT EASY I SET A HIGH STANDARDS FOR ALL POSTS I READ THIS IS ONE OF THE RARE PEACES I CAN SAY MET THAT STANDARD COMPLETELY.

G. and Mentill -- It's too easy, we've done spun minds together
But, believe it, my audience. . Realize that the sun shines forever

Yes the sun does shine forever.....something i should realize becuz i have been beginning to give up in life.
This was nice....
I loved the collab, Your vocab was excellent and so was this topic. I hope to read more from you.
Overall- 10.10

can you guys check out mine?