Im in love once again
Is it rite to be with him
He was with my best friend
Should i ask her or just dive in
May be i should jus go for him
BUt my conscience tellin me no
I dont kno
I cant decide
Im losin my mind
Wats rite
Ok aight ill tell her tonite
But wut will she say
Will we have a fight
Forget it its to much trouble
I dont need him anyway
But wait is he worth it
Losing my friend over him
Man hes fine he is so cute
My friend my friend wat would she do
She wouldnt do this to me

Seems like you're really confused. You kinda go back and forth on whether you should do it or not. Looks like you'll end up doing it. I dunno. Not really a whole lot to comment on. Did writing this help you make a choice? It was an okay read. Kind of short and not really much to it. Maybe to get better you could add more details and put more of a description of what's going on? So the reader can kind of paint a picture in their head, you know? Just a thought. Keep writing.

that was pretty good-- i liked it and i could see how you were torn-- keep up tha good work

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thx fo da comment afta i wrote i kinda thought of more to write but thx fo da comment

This feels like you arent sure whether you need him or you feel something odd all over again, it feels like your playing tug o war with yourself and answering all the questions by yourself...Go with what your heart says and your next poem will show you all doors

Nice drop ma...Harley

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