OMG. Hazy baby, this piece was absolutely ADORABLE. One of the best things I've read on here in a long time, seriously! So simple, yet so full of meaning and wisdom. I loved it entirely. Every single line, great imagery, nice title and extraordinary message.
My favorite parts were:

>When you ask How are you?

Do you hear the reply?

>Ever told your child,

We'll do it tomorrow?

And in your haste,

Not see his sorrow?

Beautiful, Mama. Great to have you back on the boards.....hope you stick around for a while...

Luv, GeGe*

i've seen this before, someone sent me this in an email so forgive me for doubting your claim to being the author but nonetheless a good piece but i cannot properly respond because i've read it before, 1luv.

wonderful spoken word type of peice..ima sucker for anythign
like this i always gets me listening...that coffeehouse beat and
a smooth voice that im imagining from yourself to lace the beat

something that people could fall asleep to or wake up with...
im saying this in a good way dont get me wrong hazy...

wonderful imagery and dialogue..nothing to critique
wouldnt wanna critique..this was awesome...

scrolling aside



la paz

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i liked this...had good imaginary an descriptions, and emotion was pure..you could reall inhance every word an realize wut you was sayin...good vibe

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iight

i too have to agree with Da NFamous i belive ive gotten it in one of those dame fwds. maybe you did write this one and its simalar to the one i got i a fwd, then i would apologise, just im not sure so i cant really reply on this one either

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iight

i too have to agree with Da NFamous i belive ive gotten this poem in one of those dame fwds. maybe you did write this one and its simalar to the one i got i a fwd, then i would apologise, just im not sure so i cant really reply on this one either.

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I really liked this piece,i diden't get the meaning the first time reading it.Then i read it over again and it made a lot more sense to me.Overall it was a pretty nice poem to a hard topic,it was very basic.
Stay up...keep dropping
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That's weird, I got this one in an email too.

Ok honestly I wasn't really feeling this.
Try to make your next piece a little more complex
Try Some Imagry, similes are sweet and easy, and so are metaphors.
Mabey its just my taste in poetry or how I write.

No beef just being real

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i love this piece
i like the topic alot
and with the basic style u aplied u pulled it off big time


Ever told your child,

We'll do it tomorrow?

And in your haste,

Not see his sorrow?




Let a good friendship die

Cause you never had time

To call and say,"hi"




When you worry and hurry through your day,

It is like an unopened gift....

Thrown away.



i really liked those lines






and yes i can remember u from way back
keep posting

No comment.

I've parodized plenty of lines from other people. So I shouldn't front.

But parodization and plagerization aint the same thing.

Again, no comment.

*Shrugs*

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

I've never known Hazy to pass off someone else's work for her own....I hope she didnt this time..