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09-24-06, 12:22 AM
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Poet's Daughter.
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The Third Eye.
IP: 6370 559E
Sit down and take a seat Relax your feet’s, feel the cool breeze That’s coming out of the a/c- and wait. Million of lungs breathing in a rhythmic pace From different races, but this isn't a place Where you receive a award when finish 1st You’re just here to fulfill entertainment u thirst. Might burst a tear or two or get the worse Have your intestines ina cramp, like taking a shit But it’s the words & facial expression-can't hold it. The light starts to dim-its about to begin Murmurs turn quiet like being in a dome library People stand applauding this coming visionary Ready to read between his lines & judge his act Should he continue or cutt off his contract Let him eat the fruits of his legendary career Or choke on a seed and let him die and disappear? Curtains roll up and there’s a man with a mic Looking nice, fist clench-he's ready to fight His pupils looking at the faces-reading minds Taking his time to adjust this peak of prime. "Are you ready!?" many hands turn to claps Sinking these 'pandemonium' bullets "Let’s laugh." Before it even started it was a wrap This director turned many grins into smiles Making them hold their stomach for awhile, Jokes keep coming, pounding their humor side in piles He keeps changing styles-they can't keep up, Every line he says-it shines-never rust(y) Eye’s popping, feet’s moving, jaws dropping They keep on swallowing-he keeps on Cumming. He hits them with an uppercut closure-its over. See what people don't really realize Or probably don't understand-'comedy' is an eye. A third one, taking & showing you the light, Giving you a minute or hours out of darkness Letting you know that 'happiness' still exist in our ...living Carcass... 
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09-24-06, 02:24 AM
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IP: 666A 5381
nice drop got a bit lost but i understood wutcha was say imagery n story was nice
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09-24-06, 08:13 AM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 6370 559E
Thanks..........
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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09-24-06, 01:57 PM
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why so serious!!??
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IP: F2C8 4E42
yea this was really complex but i understood it
and its real cuz humour does take our mind off darkness flow is ight..cant really picture it to a beat but it still has flow and most of all the structure was perfect..very easy ta read i'd give this a 7.5/10 keep it dropping ma 
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09-24-06, 03:00 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 6370 559E
Thanks..........
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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09-24-06, 04:37 PM
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why so serious!!??
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IP: F2C8 4E42
^^no thank you
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10-09-06, 11:05 PM
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IP: 6D77 93CD
yo this drop was actually ight, i was feelin all the imagery you had in there. some parts of it were kinda outta sync wit the rest but overall you came wit it.
Curtains roll up and there’s a man with a mic Looking nice, fist clench-he's ready to fight ^^^^ that was prolly the bar i liked most, because i can picture it, stay up.................. |
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