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What?...
Yo Telekinetic's set up explains it all^^
Do Hate and DR, So come vote,an drop ur balls!
I see the logic, This kids a "bann'd" prospect
Already lost it...
U want wins..sure,..but wit the wrong concept
Avi^ like ur hooked on phonics...a poetic "work of not"
Everytime I look at that I see what you are not...
So stop...Reminisce, your acceptin vics wit double fists
Leavin pissed, U gave it up an still poll's missed..
U get the jist...You were wrong in askin for Vet's Only...
Your a great father to your record, never leavin your L's lonely

Ayo Vote For The Battle Against Da Savior Vs. Puertoricanelly, Good Lookin Out Peace

I battle box I expected more from Boston I leave you with more than Red Sox
Great your not your roasted, I'm leavin you servered more than KFC dead cocks
Your styles like a plastic gun bringin no drama you're not that drastic son
Survival for a classic bum here is slight...... in fight you've outlasted none
I'm the fantastic one, you're a fraud a slave man an no applauds for this cave man
Your styles basic an phony ya gay man, broke the first day like generic ray bans
You try to flow but speak not with your mouth put more work in ya bars grace
After this battle you beat so hard there's a black eye left on your avatars face
Your lyrical state of mind is worthless your skills under water an wont surface
While im breakin news your breakin bread.............. in a skill dead joker circus
Last place is ya purpose in life always afraid you always stayed away from the strife
Leave your text dead to life cause you an wack go together more than head and lice

that shit was wack as fuck...tele you need mad elevation....carson took this shit easily...with the above bein said...carson had better punches, flow, metas and shit...

Vote disqualified for inadequate feedback. Please see this thread if you need help on what qualifies as an acceptable explanation. - Axiom

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carson - good structure.......flow was on target........vocab was pretty good.......multis were tight.......wordplay was nice.........all of ya punches hit hard........good personals.......best bar: U get the jist...You were wrong in askin for Vet's Only...
Your a great father to your record, never leavin your L's lonely

telekinetic - structure was ok, lines a lil stretched........vocab was ok........some of the multis were good..........wordplay was good at times.........some of the punches landed.......ok personals........best bar: Your lyrical state of mind is worthless your skills under water an wont surface
While im breakin news your breakin bread.............. in a skill dead joker circus

conclusion - carson came wit harder punches, better flow, and had the best line in the battle so he gets my vote......

VOTE - CARSONJETX2

yo since i took the time to leave my honest opinion id appreciate if u two did the same.......

http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110019

thanx.......

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Carson your lines were tight and flowed together cool and constricted and not like run on sentences ya know what I mean dawg, dis actually turned out to be one of your better ones but not even close to da best but personals and punchlines were more than enough to give ya a win. Keep elevating like you always do man, right?

Telekinetic did o.k. not bad, but for a rap vet I expected much better lines depicted in high quality and made sense. Ya rhymes were a little to soft to compete with Carson at times and some were hitting a little but not really. Try reading a dictionary to expand your vocabulary and jus keep elevating higher and higher.

vote=CarsonJetx2

Return da favors niggas and vote on my battle already.
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110451
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109978

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http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110989

vote for this battle help out some peace!

Yo Telekinetic's set up explains it all^^
Do Hate and DR, So come vote,an drop ur balls!
^did you miss key that second line...???
I see the logic, This kids a "bann'd" prospect
Already lost it...
U want wins..sure,..but wit the wrong concept
^this was nice..good wordplay...ok punch
Avi^ like ur hooked on phonics...a poetic "work of not"
Everytime I look at that I see what you are not...
^this was a good punch needs to be worded better cut line...
So stop...Reminisce, your acceptin vics wit double fists
Leavin pissed, U gave it up an still poll's missed..
^heres your multi fun time....its a good punch
U get the jist...You were wrong in askin for Vet's Only...
Your a great father to your record, never leavin your L's lonely
^heheh i like this closer the best nice line.....



I battle box I expected more from Boston I leave you with more than Red Sox
Great your not your roasted, I'm leavin you servered more than KFC dead cocks
^streteched line good wordplay ok punch.....
Your styles like a plastic gun bringin no drama you're not that drastic son
Survival for a classic bum here is slight...... in fight you've outlasted none
^plastic gun is so played along with like water gun and....NO just NO
I'm the fantastic one, you're a fraud a slave man an no applauds for this cave man
Your styles basic an phony ya gay man, broke the first day like generic ray bans
^heheh i like the punch still too long and stretched...
You try to flow but speak not with your mouth put more work in ya bars grace
After this battle you beat so hard there's a black eye left on your avatars face
^good play off the avy.....long bars.....
Your lyrical state of mind is worthless your skills under water an wont surface
While im breakin news your breakin bread.............. in a skill dead joker circus
^weird wordplay....seemed forced......nope
Last place is ya purpose in life always afraid you always stayed away from the strife
Leave your text dead to life cause you an wack go together more than head and lice
^well this is an Ok closer.....for how much text you had you shoulda of thrown alot more punches...winner carson check it ya'll.....
http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=110989

Telekinetic

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