(Hook x2)- nas hook-

Join me in war Many will live... Many will Mourn...//
Its Money over bullshit pistols over braun...//
afraid not of none a yall cowards... but of my own strength...//
afraid not of none a yall cowards... but of my own strength...//

V-1
my style is aincient...filled wit hatred...//
watch as i shapeshift... from a plaintiff...wit patience...//
to a patient thats waiting for examination... cuz hes straight sic...//
sometimes when im stressed i say fuck this shit....//
an i just grab a 5th of henney an a dutch to split...//
so when we battle dont meet ya death fake or stage it...//
cuz if u still got yo life then im hunting you down to take it...//
cuz my flow is like murda in the first degree...//
premeditated lyrical homocide ont he industry...//
go on check the stats... an feel ya temples throbbin...
an u can be an u could be gatman cuz all im doing is Rob'n...//
cuz after six shots a petron... i aint never stoppin...//
leave u in the corner... kinda like u was boxed in...//
from me box'n or spittin lyrical toxin, it noxious...//
so yall bitches clear the room...whenever i halk spit...//
whenever my glockspit...//
whenever i talk shit...//
whever im gone rip...//
every fake villian... & im sayn ya flow strep...//
i got the cure like i was pennecillin..
my flow hexed...//
ya flow about 6 my flow best....//
leave yall suckas cursed out... while my flow blessed...//
so who'll join me in war... none of yal O.K. Next...//
let me find some real killas... that aint scared to hold a tec...//

(Hookx2)

V-2

Its the criminal... u thought i was dead...//
but im back wit avengance... an my eyes red...//
leave cowrin liek a child scared under there bed...//
an its insane how the cain remain... to reign wit pain...//
addiction is a mofucka... cracks the name...//
ya see i gotta few ill... an great tecniques...//
dont spell it proper... cuz i still put tec to ya cheek...//
an its clear to see these cowards are weak...//
youll get devoured... an i mean now in the streets.../
cuz its always been the bad side...neva sen a good side...//
watch out for my soldier... look how my fucken hood ride...//
so i really cant believe yall tryin diss this...//
i got an arm like bret farve... an bic pens...//
u could say my lyrics... be killn from long distance...//
see me in a rap... then itll a wrap...
when i wrap ya body up in plastic wrap...//
u can stick wit pea shooters...//
i got classic gats...//
that will leave u shittin in a plastic bag...//
(oh)
its B to the L to the double O D, L to the O to the Fuckin VE...//
& Cto the OU R.A.G.E...cuz my heart aint even nowhere near weak...//
when i win a battle i sit backan just call out next...//
an wit the same pen i write wit... ill draw ya last breath...//
picture sars.. the avian flu an MCD...//
roll it all into one an what infects u is me...//
i got guns trust & believe me...//
but all it takes is my hand to son u like lil weazy...//
but after a full clip ull be a lil weazy...//
chest smoking...still smith an wes totin...//
ill leave ya limbs broken...while u still hoping..//
im joking...my rhyme style potent...//
patiently waitn going through trials an tribulations...//
fighting god an satan...
wandering if the day will come when i lose my patience...//
but you know every step i take is on the path to greatness..//

(Hook x2)
Join me in war many will live many will mourn...//
its money over bullshit pistols over braun...//
afraid not of none of yall cowards... but of my own strength...//
afraid not of none of yall cowards... but of my own strength...//

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...491#post3131491
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...491#post3131491

cant say i enjoyed this to much as the whole concept has been done to death
you got skills no doubt, but i like the text to have some imagery and something
that can test the intellect, this was typical of the selfglory type gun play scripts
and although i do enjoy that in audio, in text you have to work with a lot more
components for it to be effective, id suggest tryin to rip a fresher deeper or more
thought provoking topic up, something with a message or just something that
youve thought about and you know other peeps could relate to, like is said i
can see some talent but yerr... nuff said...stay up

good lookin on the feed back playboy.

text remixes r wack

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man fuck u i personally dont care if a canadian thinks text remixs r wack i do what i want to i say whatever i want an if i wanna drop a remix that i put together ima do just that

wut difrence does it make if im canadian rofl......your an ass.............and audio goes with remix not text

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i been called worse an yeah ur right audio is for remixs..... congradulations....wanna fuckin cookie...
like i said i do what i want u dont like it then dont read my shit.. dont matter to me any man i do this for fun... half the people on this site are retarted anyway... i just do this in my spare time... to elevate my mind so if u got critisism i always accept it... an i understand that remixs r wack i think so to.. but i just had a lot of shit in my head that went to that beat so i called it a remix.. u wanna gimme some feedback on what i should do better then good lookin.. if not the shut the fuck up!

It was nice but like he said text remixes do suck ass but over all your part was bout a 8 out of 10

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I'm Sicker Than Tha Plauges That God Sent Moses-Chosen

yea i can sense u were in a deep mindset here......as for ur verse, in my eyes flow stood out here the most, althought the content was enjoyable, nothin really stood out like wow, the son yall with the hand line was kinda funny tho.......but it does seem like u took the Nas approach here
do i give a fuck if its a remix *shrugs*.....i just wanted to see what u were about and i see....*nods* keep writin my man......i did text for like a year before i decided to do audio......then said fuck it, its dumb.....then got back into it cuz the sites text section here sucks, not to mention theres alot of white people here critiquin pieces (not that aint nothin wrong with that, but heh talk about 25 cats with the same flow and no difference in charisma or swagga)

structure was ok.....like i said flow was the best thing that stood out, most of it was sorta generic, but thats good u got to that level after bein inspired

good lookin on the feedback killa yah i been writing for like 7 years i do alot of battle rap.. but mostly i just write whatever is in my head down and it seems to come together aight... goodlookin on the feedback ill be sure to return the favor on some of your work... stay up killa keep elevating... mind body and flow

lol aint really that big for text remixes or even audio remixes but ur shit actually was good i seen multies in there, i seen real good metaphores, i seen ok imagary, and ur flow was good it was on point..i like the gatman line lol nice work...i wont grade this wit a number cuz numbers can speak to much but u good keep dropping

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