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Old 12-15-06, 12:08 PM   #16
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Okay ever since I copped this beat everybody been using it lol...wow u filtered the shit outta ya lyrics that drowning sound to ya vocals is a clear overlimiting/overfiltering sign...ok ya flow gets better am better with every track...u over dragging out sum words cuz ya line structure falls short sometimes...u need to vary ya rhyme scheme an rhythms more...I like what u talking about lyrically..I feel ya religious focus...but ya repetitive flow...an your non-separate hook make the song drag...sonically it wears on the ears to listen to the same tone an rhythm for 3 plus mins...you'd lose alot of listeners after the first 30 seconds....delivery was good but again to repitious u didn't really vary the tone...ya quality took away from ya delivery as well so dont take that critique too far cuz the quality took off alot...beat choice was ill I love this beat, also lyrical focus was nice..I'm not use to u spitting about something which is a nice switch around
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Old 12-15-06, 12:16 PM   #17
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Old 12-15-06, 06:05 PM   #18
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ok im lovin this beat. what i dont like is, w/e effect it is your using is drowning out the vocals. also i see you got the layed back thing goin on but you almost sound sleepy. u still need more support n emotion in your voice even though your sorta wispering. hmmm, change up ya rhyme scheme some too lol im feelin the message though. the lyrics n everything, somethin alot of people can relate to. still got a sexy voice, iunno why but i love your accent lol
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Old 07-08-08, 02:24 PM   #19
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yeah u need to make your accent pop more and be the center of the song. turn up the vocals and pan your dubs, and have more dubs. the few adlibs helped but pan them more and turn all vocals up, along wit emotion so your voice and accent pop more.
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Old 07-26-08, 02:28 PM   #20
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k listenin...beats nice, quality is ehh lol...like the laid back flow for this track but sometimes seems to drag a lil too much...i hear soem good lyrics...i like how you took advantage of the samples in the beat...not bad track keep it up
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