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Old 01-18-04, 08:33 AM   #1
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$~A FeW LiNeZ~$

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im livin large due to my part in this swingin slingin c-game
im dove-p crowdin,gettin loud,and i truely aint doin shit for fame
ita all for tha rusha, the intense magnetude of tha deal
i live for tru consequences thats up in ya face in real
im pushin for tha feelin of bein in control of this 'proda'
to go down like malcolm,to trip this neva endin saga
i cant get this vocab to match easily wit these terms
but i get as many clients as i can and hol on to em firm
its for tha feelin of accomplishment, leavin niggas blocks disconnected
its about slingin for respect, threw ya barrel bein locked and constantly directed....


you fake ass niggas live for nuttin but bein bitches and hidein behind ya ice n bling
you aint tru to tha G shit pushin dimes of weak shit when its tha C shit you should sling
jewles aint nuttin but a wack ass way to make yourself seem like you got a high stat
how you gonna gain respect bein trick in this game, bein bitches afraid to aim a gat
i dont no bout this rap game cuz i no i aint tha best shit, im probly tha worst
but its a fact that when it comes to a bling n a gun fite tha iced out pussy drops first....
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Old 01-18-04, 08:52 AM   #2
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the first ryming scheme wasnt good but your vocab was alright, elevate
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Old 01-18-04, 03:54 PM   #3
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Yeah this was ok....structure was alright...just try to shorten some of those lines up, they were stretched out which threw the flow off in this piece....try adding some multies to it to make it better....probably could try to up your vocab a bit though...but keep at it.
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