word just about how music can really help you get thru a lot of your problems and shit. check it.

www.soundclick.com/itsdakidspul


http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238882
http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=238838

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Your quality is decent, and this beat sounds nice..reminds me of some up to date west coast snoop dogg (doggystyle) shit..

First verse, was a good flow with no flaw to what I can hear..went really well over the beat with a good tempo. Lyrics are decent..

Chorus, pretty original, and it has a good feel towards the song, probably the best part of the song..

Second verse..beyond your truthful cerium, it had basically the same flow as the first one. Pretty much same critiques that I gave on the first verse.

Chorus Again...definitly like the "On and On and On.." part..

Third verse, same flow all the way through the song. I was definitly looking for some kind of transitions through it. It took a little away from the song..

Basically besides the lack of transitions, this song had a good feel and decent direction to it. I liked it...keep dropping tight tracks.

RTF: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239278

word appreciate feed man. I gotta finish my application ish after that I got you man

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your flow is def on point. u're a rapper and thats all there is to it. All i can critique u on is lyrics. I dont feel like u're being yourself in this song, more like u tryin to convince ppl you're cool. Espically by tellin ppl what you're not. I mean if u dont sell drugs or is ghetto or watever, just dont mention it. I've heard way too many ppl say they ain't a thug, but i'm still hard and shit. Forget that, just start getting deeper with your lyrics, and talk about subjects ppl can appeal to. Even if u do rap and ain't a husstla.

Keep up the good work man.

okk.... upppppp

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aiight finally got around to RTF lol yppp

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ahh shadowville productions... good peoples..
damn liken the flow a lot ..some nice shit goin on in verse one..
Hook is damn good
delivery is nice too
i'd blast this on the radio man definitly some shit that should be heard

RTF - http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239306

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aiight appreciate feed man. uppp

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yo this was a nice track, uppin for him.. and yo hit me up sometime man maybe we can hit a collab

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okay this is a good shadowville beat....opening coulda been stronger..like u shoulda shouted an echoes" once I walk thru da door!!!" to set it off an let people u busting doors down...okay u def have grown into a nice flow but prob now is u changed ya flow an its alot more fluid but now u use this flow all the time...u relying on drags on the rhyme word at end of every line an it gets repitive...I know how u gon end every line....delivery is tight its laidback but still intense the perfect emotion for this beat....I love the hook...u punched in ya phrases jus right...thats exactly how I woulda structured a hook on this beat...u good effected it better tho like a lil trial echo on the part "on & on & on" woulda really brought it out but people gonna sing along to that shit nonetheless...an last but not least the lyrics....I liked the concept an the story line first time I really had u start an finish a topic strong...a good establishment song where u let people know what u about as a MC...good shit...def listening to this again......1

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^word def appreciate it man., thanks. upp

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what did I tell you on myspace
you're outta your so called slump

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R.I.P. Bodie