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Pen N' Paper | 2 | 28.57% | |
Kein Witz | 5 | 71.43% | |
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07-06-05, 07:20 PM | #121 |
Banned: For Being So Fly.....lol....my new account is Triple Sixes....
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ok thnx for tha vote anyways uppin this...........
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07-06-05, 10:15 PM | #122 |
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Voted For: Kein Witz
Imagery- Blah..Kein got this.. Complexity- Kein by a lot..Pen's was a lil too simple Vocab- Kein, I didn't really see any words that stood out from Pen's piece..he used a lot of repetive words...he said "everything" or a lot of "every"s. I know you meant to do that in some parts but I didnt think it sounded very well Flow- Both.. One of Kein's verses- EVERY minute of his meaningless life was always so boringly methodic. People were alarmed by his day dreams and black-outs, gave him tonics. [b]nice bar..decent vocab, flowed nicely He'd imagine he was battling monsters, when really beating old seniles. When friends told him it was make-believe he just shook his head, smiled. lol funny and i liked how you explained that he was kind of blah about life in a cool way They warned him not to have his dreams in the middle of driving his car; he never listen, because in his mind he was drinking scotch with stars. Nice line here too Pen- Everything is mediocre we stay adequate but not good Everything in life must stay the same I wish it just could meh it was ok i didnt think it sounded very well, kind of forced rhyming Change so we can live our own life and not be controlled like a puppet We get thrown away like garbage in the dumpster all we do is dump it didnt sound well when you said 'dump'ster and 'dump' but nice line on explaining the way life is Just the trash, So we keep the changes to ourselves so it can’t be removed or altered We live by the same failures but do we live by the faulted nice closer.. Kein- Your piece was very nice good job on explaining the guy's everyday life i thought there were some funny parts too..nice flow vocab Pen- Your was a lil too simple i thought it would be better if it had a stoyline..seemed like you forced some rhymes and the flow could be better too.. Sooo it was kind of one-sided to me...Vote/Kein
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