Enyg, you rush shit in your flow at times it's always a loose sylable here and there that make your flow sound stuffed together and othe times it's just gaps like you don't flow all the way to the end of the bar so it doesn't "lock" which makes you sound unpolished. Easily corrected with word conservation. You remind me of Megala of Cannibal Ox in some regards. Your flow is consistent but also redundant at times since your spit tempo is the same on pretty much everything cept on that "almight oyd" track it sounded like you put something different into it to match everyone elses tempo. Who ever did the hook on that song was way off beat, speaking beyond the bar end and the reverb made it sound worse. Actually, now that I listen to you on the second hook, its' the beat that comes back in too soon, it should have stlled for a little bit longer. You went back to your typical flow by the time the second verse started.

I'd say all in all you sound like a "close" emcee, as in you're closed to a finished product but the shortcomings that you hear in your self i also hear. It's mostly in flow like talking at one pace then rushing a part of a sentence to get more sylables in, thne going back to the normal tempo agian all in the same sentence is a no-no. Iron that out and I think you'd be pretty well off. Your beat choices are slow tempo usually more abstract underground type of sound which some people aboslutely love and other people couldn't care less for, so be mindfull of that.

And that's pretty much it.

Uno

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Word....I appreciate it. I was wondering when someone was going to tell me about all those little things I hear...lol. Sometimes I'll just put a track up to see if anyone else hears the little shit that I do......

Good Looks though.....definitely appreciated

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a Goodnight's Sleep
Here To Stay
The Truth

Thanks

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haha.. i remember this. triple did me like 2 years ago.

most my joint arent full songs. more like verses that i lost interest in the song...


but you'll get my style without a whole song.


www.soundclick.com/pheenix


Pocket Change
Can you Help me Sample (sample)
My Civil War(sample) and/or When Pigs Fly(first verse to a join im working on)

they should all be at the top

i dont have many full joints. workin on that.

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Ca'lam, damn it's been a minute. Your vocals are clear, your reverb is a little too high on that pocket change on the verses, its lifting you from the beat a little too much. Seems to be a preset for you cuz it's the same on all these tracks. You'd gain a whole lot of body in your vocals if you EQ'd your lows and mids more for your verses. Your preset for the hooks (being that there's a lot of singing) is on point. Your lyrics still tak a concious effort to make out due to the EQing as mentioned before, turnign dow nthe reverb and bringing up the mids and lows would completely turn that around. You have the makings of a real harmonic hip hop type seeing that you sing, it's to some extent liek a smooth jazz type of hip hop, and I can easily visualize someone playing through a CD of yours at a contemporary art show or say ...a wedding and in places that people are in a hip hop type of cultural vibe but normally wouldn't play hip hop at all you'd get spins there. Matter fact, I can think of more than a few art shows my brother's put on that I could se this playing at and people going 'damn..who's this?". The phase pan on When pigs fly is too overt from ear to ear, you'd want it a little more subtle on that synth so people slightly hear it, so it doesnt' become an effort on their ears after a whole song worth of wah-wah-wah-wah-wah-wah-wah back and fourth. Or another alternative is that when the synth first hits, have it start in one ear and slowly pan to the other as the tone progresses, then on the next, fades back in the other direction and so on.

One thing that I noticed is that even after listening and analyzing the songs, with the exception of Pocket Change I'm really not sure what your topics are. I think you'd aboslutely explode if you did visionary type tracks or more conceptual tracks where you're speaking to someone specific or about something specific. I don't often say this, but I think you and a professional conceptual song writer would have the makings of a run away music career. The right A&R would would fall out his seat laughin if your CD slid across his desk cuz he'd see how to align the pieces and make you a household name on tour with Jill Scott and Flowetry, and doing collabs with Maxwell and D'Angelo and a Mos Def cameo. You have some "lyrical" tracks and some collabs on your page, but I'm tellin ya man, lol don't even waste your time with that man that's way beneath what you can do, and after some massaging on your vocals, playing to your strengths and aiming at the right crowd would pay off for you BIG TIME. And I mean BIG TIME.

Your target audience is mature adults that are older and wiser now, and beyond the "rap" phase but still got that culture in em and just want to listen to something smoother. I can see this playing in the Caddy easily, like the sound track to unwind to. This is that plush leather seat music, ya feel? It's music for the grown. music for the trendy, the new young contemporary corporate america with fat pockets music.


Apexx

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Thanks Ape, (your new nick name by the way )

yea, i have a hard time writing in a straight line ya know ? i had super duper ADD/ADHD (combination of both) so mind minds all over the place. i think if i focused harder, i might be ale to fix that problem.. very much appreciated.

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Black Magic, that track "a good nights sleep" sounds like it was spit or recorded completely off beat. Your rhymescheme had change-ups that weren't anywhere near on synch with the bar start and ends in the first verse. Tightenend back up in the second verse though still wasn't what I was used to from you. And don't slack on the rhyme scheme man, you sound like you gave up on making some bar couplets rhyme 100% and just plugged in a word that ..ehh...sounded kinda similar but not enough to say it rhymes, which in 2006 equates to not rhyming at all. I can tell you had a hard time on this cuz the bpm isn't what you're normally on, and the flow you usually use sounds stretched and too segmented on a beat like this, so you fill the gaps with extra syls and it sounds like lumpy oatmeal. Your vocal quality is really good. That "here to stay" was more like it haha, I'm not sliding to sleep no more. ok,feels like now the review starts. You already know I think you can produce your beats have variety and a sounds that's marketable if you actually market it. Sounds liek you half-assed the transition to the hooks on that "the truth" and the reverb on your vese was waaaaayyyyyy too long and too bright.

That's all I can say for now, I really think you should have submitted 3 different songs or at least tracks where you spit longer than 1 verse. I'll have to catch back up to you on the IBM review, 1


`Pexx

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LE
Leady
Sense
Enyg
Bmaj
Cal'lam

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Role Model
Lemme Vent
Personal Life

-Diabolic
Verbal Assassins

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uhh like...

whats the marketability of Ike n Black Magik...the group n shit...

www.soundclick.com/youngike

listen to Ike n black magik mixtape sampler..theres 20 samples on there...listen to the first 3 if u only want 3 lol

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You can see i need the feedback...

www.soundclick.com/daubs

Hype and any other 2 cheers.

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Enyg
Bmaj
Cal'lam
DV
Ike (as IBM)
Daubs

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Woo Hoo.....I'm Next

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Lol, in a way it was one big compliment, and one big "Buy some more shit you poor bitch" lmao...but really thanks man...im workin on gettin some stuff sold, gettin a job, etc. and tryna get that equipment.. lol ...now im gettin older i can finally get a job..lmao... and im still tryna get the eqin' down..im just illiterate to it..

Thanks for it though...really helped..

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How come the first thing you went off on was buying gear?

the first thing you shoudl be doing is learning how to EQ. Depending on your skills, you might not need to buy jack shit.

Have you read this: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=224725

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