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Old 05-02-08, 11:30 AM   #1
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Love,the Stereotypical.

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Something i literrally key typed on my phone,its been a while but here it is.

If love was just words in my head
Undescribable but never forgotten
The death of thoughts
The suicide of plans to be
For that simple happy ending
Where dreams never fade
An illusional reality mists these young romanctic eyes
Until the day you depart these young inveigling arms
Where the love of unspoken words become lost feelings
Til' your eyes cross my path
The essence of your voice entrances my heart
For the next time we meet again.

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Old 05-02-08, 04:20 PM   #2
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its nice for a small short peice bro, its lacking structure though. Poems are also about the visual aswell as the content. I like a few of your lines, theres some cool emotion in it.

Stay dropping man, it was a good read.
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Old 05-02-08, 08:09 PM   #3
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thanks man. but this aint really a poem just feeling in words thats why there is no structure.
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