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Old 08-23-05, 04:48 AM   #1
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Frustrated Intensions

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Frustrated Intensions
..Enough of these tough guy’s given me frustration
If you livin my situation, and don’t fill in my temptation..
With a hectic fatality, just give me a technic mentality
So I can conflict it back, no more pain in my reality..

Lots of people be attackin me, so I show retaliation
And then flow desperation, by controllin low fascination
I don’t fate, and I wont state a unknown fact..
But I do know, I’m obsessed with a un shown stat
Limited by minimum selection, now I feel more intoxicated
Do I live to be hated? Or should I steal the recriminated
Now its back to these mirrors, when I freeze clearer
And still I cant ease terror, so I say come nearer
No more Mr. Nice, so my attitude went crazily rank
So I’m pronounced easily blank, yet I’m dizzily pranked
And still I be puttin cats in surgery wit out a permit
I could shout a legit reason, but I’m only about to make it
These people can make a decision, I’ll sake a vision..
For a perfect mission, fightin and to not fake a precision

..Confused by my enemies list, but granted policy
So I continued to attack, and I never planted privacy..

Eventually I thought I’d get caught, and locked in bars
Never was I blocked by stars, but I was shocked by scars
So I lost aspiration, in hesitation so I felt invisibility
My mind mixed up, and yet I never dealt responsibility
But people gotta talk, so a lot walk wit a limitation
So I wanted to hunt and kill, then skip a presentation
Yet I was never hidden, never forbidden but transparent
A Parallel universe, contradicts and predicts my apparent
Then in disappearance, I’m gone in a long resistance
And still I have a strong subsistence to wrong assistance
By conflicting pain, I create such a restricting shame
As my strength gets harder, I’m constricting fame

..Enough of these tough guy’s given me frustration
If you livin my situation, and don’t fill in my temptation..
With a hectic fatality, just give me a technic mentality
So I can conflict it back, no more pain in my reality..
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Old 08-23-05, 04:53 AM   #2
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Old 08-23-05, 05:03 AM   #3
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Nice piece, overall a good interesting concept that allows you to work it out in your own way. The emotion was definitely there, I had this feeling it was written straight from the heart. The flow was good, overall it remained solid throughout the entire piece. You had a good balance in your vocabulary: it wasn't too basic yet not too complex either you know.

Keep it up!
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Old 08-24-05, 07:58 PM   #4
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Word-dillio... this shit here was pretty nice... had the emotions up in there...
...good vocab. (since some peeps can't spell here)... flow was aight here
but overall... this piece was cool
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Old 08-28-05, 02:12 AM   #5
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good deep storyline...the emotion of it was the highlight.....lyrically it was ok...you coulda been more metaphorical with it...I didn't like your direct approach but it was a emotional piece..it developed well..good structure...flowed well....coulda changed up rhyme scheme some but not big deal...overal solid drop...keep it up
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Old 08-28-05, 03:08 AM   #6
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This was pretty good man...I liked your emotion on this one for sure. A nice flow to it, good vocab...I thought the vocab was good the way you made it so it was more believable such as comnig from a real person...so word. I like this shit man...keep it up
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Old 08-28-05, 01:51 PM   #7
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ehh, i have to say, i wasn't really feeling the rhyming on this one, i felt it took away alot from the overall message being thrown across; i thought you rhymed a whole bunch of words that seemed outta place, they didn't really fit context, in some places

but, it was good, i think the way you wrote this, would have been alot better to do in audio, just because of your rhyme scheme......hmm, original, which is good, keep up, not your best, but still enjoyable

Then in disappearance, I’m gone in a long resistance
And still I have a strong subsistence to wrong assistance
By conflicting pain, I create such a restricting shame
As my strength gets harder, I’m constricting fame

ending was solid, keep up.
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Old 09-10-05, 03:29 PM   #8
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you had good emotion on this but i think you do on everything pretty much really
but i wasnt feeling it as much as your other peices you usually come better lyrically but it wasnt by any means a bad drop so props
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Old 09-26-05, 01:36 AM   #9
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this isnt really one of you best peices..

vocab was ight but could have been better
like all of your peices you have good emotion..
other than those..good drop...

please peep 16 pills..by me..
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Old 09-26-05, 07:46 PM   #10
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this was pretty good. you had some really good flow in there. and i liked the way you put your words together. some parts were kind of lacking tho it seemed like you coulda had some better wordplay in there. other than that it was a decent drop. keep doin ya thing. ...........rtf...........
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