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Old 09-24-05, 09:19 PM   #1
Cuzo
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Yea this that gangsta

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Its ya boi cuzo new to this typing rap shit, tryin to get sign but i heard u got to spit fiya the name cuzo but

Allow me to reintroduce myself i get dough,im a H-to the-OG/
i knock niggas off they block like OG's,move snowflakes in the winter make cold G's
but i aint here to read and wake/
Bifocal scope tools that will read ya face/
im all highly grove i do it for Orleans sake/
man i hustla to hard not to plead my case/
you know its funny when niggas know u for money,but homie dont make me put the bread down and pick the toasters up,ice dripping off my necklace link, yes this make kids think cuzo was a frozen cup,no break down can hold me up, neither can slow me up this young boi flow is tough, and if i aint dope enough i got a neon full of heroin ill pop the trunk and open up ya nose/
i sit on wednesdays and watch tuesday go by,u still in ya monday sneakers im livin for the weekend/
we ball like we where born in sadan,call me Sadam of the army that i stand/
im armed with the cannon BOO-YA/
I kill a nigga then i Woosa/
yall niggas cant see me i putem in the blind/
i only got head shots ill putem on ya mind/
look me in the eye naw better yet my barrel/
ill put a dapple strawberry cherry on ya apple/
i piggy back niggas yall got off to early now yall off for sale and i can get off you early/
yall betta respect that boi from the south of the south/ nigga a fully automatic weap in ya mouth the coallor open on my neck im steppin in style/
and dont provoke me cuz my nine is ready to POW/
doctor Cuzo the medicine child/
i either slide you a prescrpistion or you can get it in vowel/
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Old 09-24-05, 11:04 PM   #2
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my port folio needs protection because it ill like polio infection most cats practice pranksta stats wearing gangsta hats mess around and get popped at the party bitches ain't shot nobody annoint each crew with a diffirent point of view then get strong
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Old 09-25-05, 03:36 AM   #3
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Those lines were a bitch to read, try to shorten them up, make them line up a bit more for simplicity's sake.

Vocab: could be improved a bit.

Multies: always like seein multies, try to drop a few next time, it makes the piece come across more creative.

Flow: Fixing your structure and rhyme scheme will help this out in the future.

If you want to elevate try battling people, or just keep droppin' in OM and heeding the feedback. Keep spittin man. Peace.
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Old 09-25-05, 05:39 PM   #4
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