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02-28-03, 03:40 PM | #1 | ||||||
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PLEASE RATE: "Bang"
IP: A63D 6E15
**This is a verse i spit about dis dude that was talkin shit about me in my hood...he neva responded. i'm tryin to get better so do me this:
*rate it (1-10..."10" is best) *give best line *give any CONSTRUCTIVE criticism Thanks y'all...\ -L. Dash **I put this in OPEN MIC too** ------------------------------------------------------------------------------------ This dumb nigga Tyrone Daye/ Kinda like [Liberaci] or Marvin...'Tyrone's GAYE'/ You're a "doldier"-Stay in your place/ Or I'll take ya Tims off ya feet, and stomp a hole in your face/ You're a full blown punk, dun-swear that you're Blood/ You'll only rock those colors if i spray you wit slugs/ You're older than me but you sure ain't raw/ Call me BARB-speak and i'll WIRE your jaw/ You tried to diss me-try to be evil/ WE DON'T BELIEVE YOU-YOU NEED MORE PEOPLE/ Call me 9.11...cuz Lord Willin'/ My fist will be the plane while the chest plays the building/ Don't risk ya life wit the kid that's nice/ 'Cuz when i get ya, i stay on you like white on rice/ Retire ya life-this is such a disaster/ I'ma hang ya fucking ass like banners in rafters/ Every girl you get looks like Killa Cam/ Or is from the zoo-look like gorillas fam/ Why would a chick even fuck with a fag/ I guess you mack wit ya head under a bag/ You talk real hard-but inside you're not/ [Ya gangsta's like 50 Cent-nigga, IT"S SHOT/ Me, you're not but you wish you could be/ [It can't happen like thug niggas wearing Yale hoodies]/ You're retarded; this beef-you started this/ Fuck around and you could get clapped like an audience/ ...Or made to bleed from the brain/ You so grimey only time you get dimes is when you're receiving change/ Money, don't speak on the clothes/ Cuz ya wifebeaters look like Busta's car-riddled with holes/ Don't get mad cuz I'm real and you're so-so/ I'll call ya Nate Dogg-got ya ass screaming 'OH NO"/ |
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02-28-03, 04:46 PM | #2 | ||||||
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IP: A63D 6E15
**HIT THIS SH*T PLEASE! IT MAY SEEM LIKE I"M BEING PUSSY BUT I THRIVE ON INPUT!
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02-28-03, 04:59 PM | #3 | ||||||
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IP: AE03 3F05
I THINK YOUR SHIT HAD GREAT LYRICAL CONTENT KEEP WRITIN
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02-28-03, 06:48 PM | #4 | ||||||
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IP: 399E F0FD
aight let me rate this man... a 6.5 dawg... or a 7... can't make up my mind...
Best line? ok... "dun-swear that you're Blood/ You'll only rock those colors if i spray you wit slugs"... this one was sharp... good punch line... Yo man, for a battle verse this was aight... could have used better punchlines, and more wordplay, oh and your flow was descent... -1- |
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03-11-03, 09:06 AM | #5 | ||||||
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IP: A63D 6E15
ill giv u roun a 7.5.
best lines... ...Or made to bleed from the brain/ You so grimey only time you get dimes is when you're receiving change/ Don't get mad cuz I'm real and you're so-so/ I'll call ya Nate Dogg-got ya ass screaming 'OH NO"/ Call me 9.11...cuz Lord Willin'/ My fist will be the plane while the chest plays the building/ |
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03-11-03, 11:45 AM | #6 | |||||||
Got More Meds Than Pfizer
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IP: 144A ADA4
it's a'ight.... but if he's talkin' shit about you why would you write a rhyme to him... just deal with the bitch... or is it the other way around.... (u the bitch)... like serious, is he even goin' ta see this.. my fav line was "Kinda like [Liberaci] or Marvin...'Tyrone's GAYE'/"... that was pretty jokes....
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