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02-13-04, 01:58 AM
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Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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I am afraid.
IP: 1F5D 58AC
Does absence make the heart grow fonder?
Thus passions take a start and go farther! I miss you, every last part of your being I would act out for everyone if you are seeing Where are you, I wake up alone at night Searching the covers, alone and in fright Dream of you as my security blanket Cover my fears, shielding me quick Ignorance is bliss, do I contradict Life without you encompassing me Dream a little dream of me... I dream of you and I don’t want to wake Someone asked me a question today... What’s your biggest fear? |
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02-13-04, 03:32 AM
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Banned: Compromised Account
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IP: A560 AB42
lol..is that lady divinity in your avy??
is this about her?..lol tight...lmao.. nah but..this was ok i guess.. with my interpretation of this...i'd say ur fear is like being alone or some shit.. so its coo....^correct me if im stupid.. anyway..this piece is kinda short to really get into..so ill just say that the concept's examples can be more original.. dont knkow what i mean?..sorry.if u dont...but peace.... http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114002 peep it http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=114002 |
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02-13-04, 12:01 PM
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Fuck You, I Rhyme Better
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IP: 36C8 14D5
dont worry about it too much
but thanks for your reply |
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02-13-04, 12:31 PM
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The Golden Chyld
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Short and to the point man .. dope .. I liked the way you took the idea a lot .. the shortness didn't take away from the piece in this one man .. this had a lot of true felr lines in here ..
Dream of you as my security blanket Cover my fears, shielding me quick But that line there was the one that had me .. I thought it was dope man .. very real and recognizable .. nice piece here again man .. keep writin .. one |
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02-13-04, 12:45 PM
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IP: 6236 079F
Nice..short and sweet..so is my reply...^^
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02-13-04, 12:53 PM
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IP: FF89 3C60
Dope stuff...
Not rap, though. This is poetry. And it's very good. Deep. Expressive. And slightly creepy if you've started stalking femcees. But whatever works for you, man. Peace
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02-13-04, 12:59 PM
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IP: 4577 CD9A
its real...content good...not complex or anything but just expressive as stated above...ok peice
RiZ
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02-13-04, 01:16 PM
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IP: 36C8 14D5
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LOL...thank you for reply and i did drop this in poetry forum i just put it here as well |
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