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Caught him thuggin, muggin on tha corner
Never saw him before, he was a foreigner
Hat low, pants low, but he was straight high
Already makin plans to kill him....he must die
He gave me a bad vibe, sumthin bout him I ain't like
He slowly faced me and and mugged like I ain't gone fight
Without movin my lips I told him to state his purpose
Of being on my block before I erase him like his life was worthless
The blunt in my hand started sendin smoke to my eyes
And this nigga had a blunt too, to my surprise
He asked me "what kinda shit you smokin?"
Wit a mean sneer to invoke fear I just told him that its potent
I took a hit of mine,he took a hit of his
Realize we looked so alike, you'd think we were twins separated as kids
He laughed and said "I only smoke blunts wit high taste and a lil lace
To tha point where I'm so high I can't feel my face"
He even told me my shit was dipped too
Said his dope boi was the same crip too
I touched my .45, muttered "Nigga you wildin"
He touched his heat too and just started smilin
It was like he was readin my thoughts....I took another puff
He inhaled too, even with my signature huff
Had to let him know"Aiyo, yoiu gotta dip"
He barely moved, just said "you gotta lotta lip"
That was the last straw, I aimed tha heat, ready to kill
He grabbed his at the same time and said"Both our blood gonna spill"
I emptied the clip...he shot too
Layin in my blood I heard him laugh and say "Nigga I AM YOU!"
I died with him right there...and when my family saw the casket

A neighbor told them that he saw me arguin and shootin my self



...All because I was faded off a blunt that was dipped in acid

so tragic

lol that was dope homey.....keep it gangsta....keepin comin

!Propz! Nice Drop' ...!! Dope' Just Like Ecko Said' ...!! Stay Up Boi ^

Wun Luv

-Out-

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fa sho...thank you for the feedback...



nice pics lunatic^^....

FaSho' .. !! Yo' Welcome ..... BabeBoi


-Keep Doing What Chu Do-

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eeeeeeewwwwwww good story fam..........CS.........holla!

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C.S. WHAT???????!!!!!!!!!!!

hot story fam..........killem all homie. ha.

s.v.

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R.I.P. Jonathan "ONE MAN BAND/TERUMOTO" Nigro. Goodbye brother. God bless the dead. One love.

hahahaha fas ho you know how we do....anyways keep tha feedbsck coming please...Uno

I felt it a lot...imagery was nice...flow was near flawless....everything was set up real good...i knew where it was goin...so if you were goin for a suprise than you might wanna work on that...but yea....i also think you should of left the very last part out...because we all kinda got the picture...you should of stopped at "Nigga I am you!!!" that was perfect...but anyways...good drop...keep bangin..It'd be nice if you could check out my latest open mic the title is immortal technique topical...it shouldn't be too hard to find it's close to the top...anyways...regardless if you check it or not....2 fingas one love

holla

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Just kidding.......LOL. That shit was pretty tight, but you probably already know that, don't you..........

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LOL...youre a bastard...uppin!

damn can I get some more feedback please?

Uppin

A jo i liked this..stay up and keep droppin