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Prayer seems so paradoxical
Implausible to say the least
Yet being unfair is logical
Inexhaustible the way he sees
Because to believe is to ease the mind
And even though we know
Faith’s an empty glass we’d rather ask
Than have to go alone
So we're owned by this distant mass
Insistent his path’s enthroned
We listen alas that religion perhaps
Will happen to cast the stone
Of tragedy prone existence lifted
By the grace of a face we’re never shown
Praised his name in hopes for a place
In this supposed savior’s home
But salvation alone won’t adhere it
It’s appearing secure that sells
An amalgamation of the Holy Spirit
And our inherent fear of hell
Cept hell is just a mirror image
Of the resentment held
Nailed through appendages
And though intended this
trust was sentenced to fail
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For Heaven’s a roll of quarters
Loose change you make the call
Got a message and you wholly accept his
Blessing our not at all
Still sin’s not our fault
We’ve just been convinced we must atone
Though the messiah’s unlisted
I dialed the digits
But religion didn’t pick up the phone

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be what you speak, never speak on what you be
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weerd...was feelin this opener hot now you me an nos play wit that ill vocab....weerd an for you lil herbs that think he's a herb its adamant from rb....my good friend....

no doubt, thanks for replying

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be what you speak, never speak on what you be
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absolute.....i'd tell you to get in tha topical league but they shut that shit down....

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be what you speak, never speak on what you be
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This was good shit. What I took from it, was that so many human beings base their whole lives trying to get into this place called heaven, while there is no proof that it actually exists. So why do we bother trying to recieve our way in at all..

The last bit was killer..

ve just been convinced we must atone
Though the messiah’s unlisted
I dialed the digits
But religion didn’t pick up the phone

That there, basically put everything into context for me. And unfortunatly I dont have much to critacise from this.. So Ill ask you to just keep dropping good poetry like this and stay up brutha.

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thanks man, it's much appreciated

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be what you speak, never speak on what you be
-Sole

This was great, nice flow to this and the words you used were great to get your point across, i as well, appreciated the last section of this poem, very well written and delivered, beautiful imagery, keep them coming.......1

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thank ya
i appreciate yer reply

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be what you speak, never speak on what you be
-Sole

anyone else?
'for this sinks to the bottom

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be what you speak, never speak on what you be
-Sole

upped for you sleepy bastids

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be what you speak, never speak on what you be
-Sole