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02-02-04, 01:06 PM
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Banned: Spamming
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Hemisphere Presents:Dream or Reality...
IP: C1DA C961
Is this a Dream... Reality: “The night seems young” I’m thinkin’ with driblets of warm blood on my tongue I study the light fading from jewels as a weakened heart pumps This dark hunt is ordained ritual as survival is the most critical Part of livin~ even if unlife is the measure of an individual Still ravished, I feel the flood of this new blood pass and wane This ain’t like the eighty’s. Good phuckin’ blood is hard to ascertain these days (What’s that) The sound of screams starts to flood through the trees A collision? A literal feast~ My movements camoflauged by the breeze Dream: Ravesh teeth... Searching for beef to put you ten metres beneath... Star under wreath... And after I'm done blood is all thats bequethed... Fury rages and sin engages to bring my claws down on your chest... Blood on my jaw from ages... After death, the evil keeps youre soul possesed... Claws to break jaws.. then dig deep and rip out you're heart.. Withdraw and find the next victim.. stricken to make their life depart... Whilst making a cuisine of teens spleen.. I sense another demon.. Feeling of a vampire in my midst so I observe and leave my meal of these men... Reality: I break soft, springing from branches advancin’ toward the cause In this flight, a thought of gorging in the bath has me lost ‘Bloodsick’~ The smell of flesh, charred~ Evidently, a dark gesture This mess of men~ I approach with expectancies of overflowing pleasure A woman crawling from wreckage, half-naked goin’ in shock Her neck pulses at my presence~ I draw with haste knowin’ she got A few minutes but I’m finished and feelin’ this energy run (Wait!!) I come to a halt sensing an enemy come Dream: Transform back in to human and feel a need for blood warm on my lips... Call-a-cab.. before he knows it, change back and blood stabs onto my teeth-tips... Steal his taxi and drive from my sense communication.. Feeling to find this evil creation... Stop to get fuel.. and next thing, theres a bloodbath in the gas-station... Finally arrive at the destination.. And spy a vampire sinking teeth in a young skirt.. Biting on aim. Looks like a kiss that hurts, but infact he's making the lady's soul convert.... Another evil of the night like me, I see, with a love of death... Were on the same level to a degree.. Notice him in alarm not finishing off her breath... Reality: Turn slow, this man’s a beast and that’s one thing that I know I hesitate to speak, I’d rather eat before these victims get cold 20 below~ With a monster feeding alongside me, the frenzy’s heightened Feeding fury arising~ shells are drained each single time that I bite em Dream: We know each other here in silence, whilst humans scream in fear... The vampire spears necks with fangs as he passes for the pain is severe... He finds his next victim, as do I.. All humans cry as we start the mass slaughter.. Rip through arteries and crushing skulls.. Roll cars and crush a man and his daughter Reality: My skin is hot from the serum under it~ Help has arrived, runnin’ I disappear in shadows wonderin’ if the other escaped this one in- One million chance~ A feast where a monster or, perhaps, two Can eat good. If nothing else, I’d say that this was definitely somethin’ new Dream: Continue-killing... crush a car full of kids.. Then slice the neck off a priest... The evil feast... Vampire and werewolf the beasts, making everyone deceased... Decend down with death by myside... Killing for fun.. Blood turns the tide... Mothers pleaing.. While babies cried, a swing of the claws and then they've died.. Next thing I know, the paramedics hit the site... I do my routine and run from the scene... Change back to human and jump into my stolen cab.. leaving, making sure I'm not seen. Then speed through traffic and go back to my lair.. Still feeling the pulse of bloody vein.. After I flew, I knew "well that was new"... The next night, I'm killing again.. ...Or...Is this a Reality... I would like to thank you for taking your time to read this..many say that I'm all hype and I'm only respected by newbies(been nominated for legends four times and denied all four,although I thought Journey or Commerical vs Underground was good enough to make it!)~to all the haters..Fuck You!!!..This is what I'll do to you...peace... Last edited by Penskills : 02-02-04 at 02:50 PM. |
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02-02-04, 01:33 PM
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IP: 9EF9 3A9E
I really liked this man. This piece was awsome,i love your style. Your Flow was great, vocab was just as good, and your multis were off the hook man. it just kicked ass in all ways. A little long but whatever man it's hot.
I dropped my first on this site, return the favour will yah? http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=111585 |
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02-02-04, 02:27 PM
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nice spit man i liked the concept...it was hot...very well thought and complex..lookin forward to peepin more of ya shit...but could you please hit this up for me http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/showthread.php?t=109937
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02-02-04, 02:34 PM
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This was a pretty cool piece. I never really see anyone go this far into science fiction on an open mics.We could use more people coming this amaginative. The flow was aight, but what really stuck out to me was the imagey. I could completely see the picture that you were painting in this story. It was a pretty nice piece. And lol @ that outro.
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02-02-04, 02:47 PM
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lol..... you got a noob following...... i think this was up to your usual standards... maybe seemed stretched out in places, but the use of multis n internals, kept the flow going.... a well expressed drop,.... and original... i liked it man.... keep at it twin
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02-02-04, 03:26 PM
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"The Eleete"
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IP: 0630 0104
Haha once again Pen shows his Skills.....haha! damn dawg that shit was ill no doubt as always....Great read.......Man your flow is always great...very poetic my friend an the last verse was the best lol!!! I feel you man....originality, creativity, flawless, always a trait wit you Pen!!
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02-02-04, 03:37 PM
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damn real worth the read.....great imagery and story....topic was consitant...liked that.....really liked this alot....metas and you qordplay were pretty vivd....flow was on point throughout.....great structure.......great peice....9/10 maybe 10 .....practically perfect....
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02-02-04, 03:40 PM
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im not feelin it...matter of fact...i didnt read it....no frontin here...........you fuckin suck...
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02-02-04, 04:12 PM
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^^^^Fucking idiot...man doesnt understand poetic rap....This was another magnificent piece of yours. I agree with Dev, some of it seemed a little stretched, but no problem as it generally had good flow. Good use of mutlies and wordplay...Good imaginary(your best trait) along with good vocab...Nice piece.
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02-02-04, 04:23 PM
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*applause* *applause*.......poetic indeed........*applause*.....man i love the vocab in here.....i would imagine some of these roughnecks took a second look at some of the lines, i like the multis....*applause* shit was tight....good job :}-~
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02-02-04, 07:02 PM
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sorry about the whole thing...had some major..major problems, almost got kicked outta school......still tryin to sort it out......
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Worthy of awe and praise Respect "..Very nice..Very emotional...real Deep piece..I really enjoyed reading this..there are few good writers on this site..and I think they are good cause simply they write some good shit..but..rarely I enjoy reading a piece..but..this was fantastic..peace.."
<center>HemiSphere The Write Side Of Your Mind</center> <imgsrc=http://www.rapbattles.com/forum/attachmentid=8588&stc=1>
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02-02-04, 07:13 PM
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So Tired Of It.
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IP: C1DA C961
i say dope..i aint a newb follower...just dope
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02-02-04, 10:27 PM
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Banned: Spamming
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IP: C1DA C961
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02-02-04, 11:02 PM
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That's Right...I'm White
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Very nice as usually everything that i read of your's is unique in it's own way. I like the way you switch between reality and dream it's cool. The imagery was really good. The vocab that was in this was actually amazing, hmm can't really find anythig wrong, i mean flow was tight, vocab was sweet, structure was great....hmm but yeh nice outro haha nice shit....anyway keep droppin...like your stuff
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02-03-04, 09:11 AM
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damn...ill peice...
ill in all aspects...all I can say is damn... the concept and the imagery was ill as fuck... Keep Spittin... Return the favor...check the battle in my sig... |
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