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Old 06-30-08, 05:49 AM   #1
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Flight ( 2 ) vs LFS ( 0 )

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Due times:
Check in due Wednesday 11.59pm EST.
- if you don't check in by this time, and you DO end up posting, -2 votes.
Verses due by Friday 11.59pm EST. Yeah, that's eastern. not pacific.
Lateness = -2 votes even IF your opponent allows you to post late.
Max. extension = 24 hours, to be granted by your opponent.

Line limits:
10 min and 20 max. for regular battles. 16 min and no max in champ matches. If no line limit agreed, second battler to post must match first battler. But ultimately, first battler gets to set the line number by how much he posts.

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Old 06-30-08, 04:45 PM   #2
p4ntzistheish
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Checkin in. 16 ok?
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Old 07-02-08, 06:54 AM   #3
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yeah, 16 is fine.
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Old 07-03-08, 11:48 PM   #4
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won't be on tomorrow, so i wrote something up

new bitch, bottom of the list... you better come with something hot
when the mag doesn't mention you at all.. its obvious you're going under, dog
while i drop with the top heads, sorry bro, just what the thugs say
shit, i was getting so much props... L thought we battled on the runway
gotta appreciate the irony, watch me break and bash this bum
cause while no one's ever heard of L... i'm about to fucking hand him one
that about seals it right there, there's no way he can punch heavy
and i would club you so fucking badly... but you're an 'E' away from one already
its an odd name, but it comes in handy places, no matter how bizarre
cause i took your girl out till 3 last night, and letter have it hard
you can tell hes not a hit with the ladies, see, i fight em off with a bat
so when i snatch this away quickly... it'll be the most action he's ever had
you can say some similar stuff about us, but so different i have to laugh man
cause see, i have a power rank... you just fucking stink THAT bad
but i'll give you some hope alright? gotta show some love
you just may end up taking flight... after i fucking smack ya around enough
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Old 07-04-08, 08:43 AM   #5
p4ntzistheish
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*sigh* Here we go, first battle I've had in a while,
But I can afford to be shit when I'm up against a pile,
We go back us two, O.G.'z in fact we were friends I'd say,
But did you lose your skill in the name change Kesse?*
I mean seriously 1-2? I got a secret that I think'll help you,
Go back to riding Red Bull's coat tails is what I'd do,
Or better yet just keep trying, it doesn't hurt to lose too,
My question to the league is HOW IS THIS GUY NUMBER TWO,
Going into this week how could you feel good about the outcome?
I could catch 25 doin this in the streets where I come from,
When I'm done, Flight, Drakel, whoever the fuck will be a new man,
But not a Queer Eye makeover, more like iSPY an incoming van,
Truck, fuck that last line was filler, whatever I got this shit won already,
This is win one in my championship run, go ahead and ready the confetti,
Better luck next time mate, we're boys so please take this beating light,
I'll save you some trouble, cuz I served my own nuts on this Flight...

Not bad I don't think. G'luck Flight.
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Old 07-04-08, 10:44 AM   #6
JTR
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new bitch, bottom of the list... you better come with something hot
when the mag doesn't mention you at all.. its obvious you're going under, dog
gotta appreciate the irony, watch me break and bash this bum
cause while no one's ever heard of L... i'm about to fucking hand him one
but i'll give you some hope alright? gotta show some love
you just may end up taking flight... after i fucking smack ya around enough

vs.

*sigh* Here we go, first battle I've had in a while,
But I can afford to be shit when I'm up against a pile,
Better luck next time mate, we're boys so please take this beating light,
I'll save you some trouble, cuz I served my own nuts on this Flight...

Flight your whole verse was consistent there was other shit i could have qouted but i just barely didnt... LFS ur opener and closer were dope but you gotta work on your wordig and rhyme scheme man and then you'll be better

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Old 07-04-08, 07:03 PM   #7
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new bitch, bottom of the list... you better come with something hot
when the mag doesn't mention you at all.. its obvious you're going under, dog
^Ehhh, alright.

while i drop with the top heads, sorry bro, just what the thugs say
shit, i was getting so much props... L thought we battled on the runway
^Alright.

gotta appreciate the irony, watch me break and bash this bum
cause while no one's ever heard of L... i'm about to fucking hand him one
^Good punch. Even though everyone says L lines are played.

that about seals it right there, there's no way he can punch heavy
and i would club you so fucking badly... but you're an 'E' away from one already
^Alright.

its an odd name, but it comes in handy places, no matter how bizarre
cause i took your girl out till 3 last night, and letter have it hard
^Decent.

you can tell hes not a hit with the ladies, see, i fight em off with a bat
so when i snatch this away quickly... it'll be the most action he's ever had
^Haha.

you can say some similar stuff about us, but so different i have to laugh man
cause see, i have a power rank... you just fucking stink THAT bad
^Haha. I liked this one alot.

but i'll give you some hope alright? gotta show some love
you just may end up taking flight... after i fucking smack ya around enough
^Pretty good.



*sigh* Here we go, first battle I've had in a while,
But I can afford to be shit when I'm up against a pile,
^Alright.

We go back us two, O.G.'z in fact we were friends I'd say,
But did you lose your skill in the name change Kesse?*
^Naaah.

I mean seriously 1-2? I got a secret that I think'll help you,
Go back to riding Red Bull's coat tails is what I'd do,
^Alright but worded badly.

Or better yet just keep trying, it doesn't hurt to lose too,
My question to the league is HOW IS THIS GUY NUMBER TWO,
^Naaah.

Going into this week how could you feel good about the outcome?
I could catch 25 doin this in the streets where I come from,
^Naaah.

When I'm done, Flight, Drakel, whoever the fuck will be a new man,
But not a Queer Eye makeover, more like iSPY an incoming van,
^Naaah.

Truck, fuck that last line was filler, whatever I got this shit won already,
This is win one in my championship run, go ahead and ready the confetti,
^Not really a punch.

Better luck next time mate, we're boys so please take this beating light,
I'll save you some trouble, cuz I served my own nuts on this Flight...
^Haha.

Flight had some good ones. A few mediocre punches and then a couple hard hitting lines. Pretty consistent for the most part. A few of them could have been worded better.

LFS, you've elevated since last time I saw your battles and I didn't expect you to come as hard as you did. You had the right idea but some of your punches were worded badly and a few weren't really directed at him. Work on making sure you don't glorify, or if you do just do it in the setup, then follow through with a killer punch. Good drop though.

V/Flight
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Old 07-04-08, 08:33 PM   #8
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new bitch, bottom of the list... you better come with something hot
when the mag doesn't mention you at all.. its obvious you're going under, dog
na.

while i drop with the top heads, sorry bro, just what the thugs say
shit, i was getting so much props... L thought we battled on the runway
k.
gotta appreciate the irony, watch me break and bash this bum
cause while no one's ever heard of L... i'm about to fucking hand him one
ok.

that about seals it right there, there's no way he can punch heavy
and i would club you so fucking badly... but you're an 'E' away from one already
no.

its an odd name, but it comes in handy places, no matter how bizarre
cause i took your girl out till 3 last night, and letter have it hard
rofl.

you can tell hes not a hit with the ladies, see, i fight em off with a bat
so when i snatch this away quickly... it'll be the most action he's ever had
haha. good again.

you can say some similar stuff about us, but so different i have to laugh man
cause see, i have a power rank... you just fucking stink THAT bad
eh, ok.

but i'll give you some hope alright? gotta show some love
you just may end up taking flight... after i fucking smack ya around enough
decent closer.



*sigh* Here we go, first battle I've had in a while,
But I can afford to be shit when I'm up against a pile,
k.

We go back us two, O.G.'z in fact we were friends I'd say,
But did you lose your skill in the name change Kesse?*
na.

I mean seriously 1-2? I got a secret that I think'll help you,
Go back to riding Red Bull's coat tails is what I'd do,
k bad wording.

Or better yet just keep trying, it doesn't hurt to lose too,
My question to the league is HOW IS THIS GUY NUMBER TWO,
no.

Going into this week how could you feel good about the outcome?
I could catch 25 doin this in the streets where I come from,
no.

When I'm done, Flight, Drakel, whoever the fuck will be a new man,
But not a Queer Eye makeover, more like iSPY an incoming van,
na.

Truck, fuck that last line was filler, whatever I got this shit won already,
This is win one in my championship run, go ahead and ready the confetti,
self glory, na.

Better luck next time mate, we're boys so please take this beating light,
I'll save you some trouble, cuz I served my own nuts on this Flight...
lmao. better.


About time you brought some consistency to ya verse Flight, I haven felt like you been tryin these past 2 battles effort wise. An this week you came out pretty hard n consistent, good shit man. LFS, I read some of your battles when you signed up, an this was above what I had expected from you. You showed some potential, you jus need to work on wording an delivery on your punches. We'll be lookin for you to elevate this season. Good battle.

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Old 07-06-08, 10:41 PM   #9
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