sitting here thinkin
and thinkin...
and thinkin...
and thinkin...
thinkin of the right words to say
to sway your mind into thinkin that this is sum dope shit.
…not your average run of the mill poem,
I want Langston Hughes to quote this.
but its hopeless.
Cuz i can't think of shit to write.
all night Duel with a pad armed with pencil,
sketching and scratching as my hand becomes my trash cans eating utensil
feeding endlessly this bottomless pit
with each sheet of script I rip
the scene is suspenseful...
think.
scribble.
think.
scribble.
think...
SCRATCH-RIP!
In my room Mari, Juana and I kiss passionately
until the table side lamp transforms into a foggy sunrise
wasting time
trying to remember how to link thoughts to words and construct rhymes
but since this affair began,
Memory decided that she didn't fit in this relationship
so now she slips
off to somewhere distant tonight
And I'm stuck here trying to remember how to teach myself to think...
scribble.
scribble.
scribble.
SCRATCH!
so now I sit chin on hand mimicking the process of thought,
not succeeding in the actual action. I just hope this performance is bought.
by my mind that is,
and allow me to partake in such a thing
this is true suffering
a writer, with fully functioning muscle abilities unable to write.
not cuz he physically can’t but because mentally something aint right.
maybe its the lack of inspiration.…
so I grab a book and force words inside of my head
but instead, I read 3 sentences and forget the 1st 2 that I read.
Scribble.
Scribble.
as I'm writing random thinkings
in flashes blinking
strobe light like leaving stanzas sinking,
inking into the parchment
its been long since I've been able to start shit
-pause quick- to think
oh shit I lost it.
RIP!
right now It may be hard to notice, but know this
that somewhere in this sea of confetti is poem composed entirely of Dope Shit

LMAO, damn,how did i miss this dopeness, Featured~FLUID

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oh shit.. I like this one.. wow.. good subject too! Very good imagry. I liked this alot..
Stickey'd!!!!!!!!!
Hmm over all..
9/10
Keep this up..
Sweft

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yeah, this was cool....super imagery, easily relatable which can get the reader involved more with the message you're trying to send....i liked it, good idea and you wrote it very well....not as much emotion, mainly because i think the topic and the angle you took didn't allow for that much, plus it didn't really need it......this was a good poem to just ponder on, and relate, haha, i like those........keep up for sure

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Quiero trabajar en un poema con usted. Si eso es bueno con usted.

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Para el hombre seguro. podemos trabajar en un poema juntos obtiene apenas en mÃ- cuando usted tiene algún tiempo libre.

thank yall for the good feeds

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Bien usted me dice. Solo mandame tu tema o verso y yo te puedo ayudar.

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y yo te puedo ayudar? ja ja ja no no no! la amiga cerr'o ventana! soy idota.. usted sabe lo que hacer. adios

Arrepentido para el "freeposting." <~~ no say! soy gringo!
quien sabe.
Sweft

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damn 4sho worth the read fam....i liked the repetiton shit came through nice nad created a good effect, there was complexity in the poems simplicity (<----that sounds dope, lol) and wokred well, the shit flowed and conveyed a good message...keep em comin, dopeness yo

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Hahahaha Thats Why I Love Ya Shit Sun Your So Fucking Original With It This Was Dope As Fuck Good Imagery And Emotion Kept Me Captivated In Here Kinda In A Hip Hop Type Form But Still Poetic Kinda Like A Saul Williams Joint This Is Purely Dope Here Sun Nice Drop

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^^in other words your scared running from a battle on a site made for battling and your mod so you dont have to battle you just duck and pop shit?
herb

ok ok ok...
thanx for the feeds once again. and i will return the favors next week when i drop a new piece... i may actually write a new one just to show my love for yall

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In my room Mari, Juana and I kiss passionately
until the table side lamp transforms into a foggy sunrise
wasting time
trying to remember how to link thoughts to words and construct rhymes
but since this affair began

^this part had me like say what!? :lol: I love this piece very imaginary leaves it up to the reader's imagination

This needs to get featured

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Awesome Drop Calm, This Was Seriously
One Of The Most Creative Pieces Ive Read On Rv Ever
Loved The Endind, Shit Was Solid Throughout Its Entirty
Damn Well Impressive Man, Stay Up....nice Drop....lol, Really Nice..

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i'll play on ya consience, ya contents is complete nonsense
speak of biting, then you fucks flip everyone of my damn concepts
what the fuck, was you high..?
did you think i wouldn't recognize lines that i made
then you come up some bullshit tryna prove that im gay...!
.
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fake fucks..move on...!

thanx fam. its much appreciated

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This is dope....everything about it, thoughts just pouring out.......finally featured,sorry i havent been on in awhile,i'm trying to balance this schedule out....but check your pm box

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