But is he there to destroy her, only time will tell…

What if Dorothy took the red brick road?
If she didn’t have lacking friends to bare the load?
If that house from Kansas fell on a good witch…
Would her journey to Oz, make a big switch?

Though he was quiet there was a sense of mystery
Not afraid to show who he is, if she was listening
So they walked, hand in hand, through her quest
Walking so quickly; she could barely keep her breath
Then she started to feel, she couldn’t keep his pace
He sensed this somehow, and left her in this place.
Now she was alone again and then began to realize
This world wasn’t what it seemed, just a disguise.
Once again she was confronted; a choice in her path
Once again, she must choose and survive the aftermath

What if Dorothy took the red brick road?
If she didn’t have lacking friends to bare the load?
If that house from Kansas fell on a good witch…
Would her journey to Oz, make a big switch?

Could she count once more on a man to lead the way?
Or would he break her again, only lead her to dismay?
The answer was unknown; she decided to take the risk
And board once again on an undoubtedly sinking ship
Not long before she was wondering, walking alone.
Merely hoping to make it to Oz, and then safely home
She found herself in a field of roses, so white and so pure
Suddenly there he was holding a rose, and maybe the cure
Pretty little Dorothy, alone and scared, what was she to do?
Maybe he was right, maybe he would grant her heart anew

tha title made me not wanna read it think it was jusft somethin stupid but i gave it a chance and you actually put some thought into this piece..i didnt like your hook but its your hook not mine and some people are actually worth it in life even though many can hurt you...peace

i loved this piece...especially the abandonment issue...i really related to that

I've been looking forward to this peice, and you didn't disapoint. You came with some really thought provoking words. Is there any other parts to this?

~Shalom~

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Originally posted by Bruklor Nec is just dumb

I'm taking that as a compliment.

yes, I was going for 3 peices but I think there might have to be 4 because I can't fit in what I want to in the way I want to post this, hook, bars, hook, bars. So I think there will have to be 4 but I can promise you this will not be a crappy end, I've been working on this for a while now. But thanks so much for the complaments and I will make sure not to disapoint y'all in the future. And for that first comment, I didn't feel like typing the whole (what if Dorothy took) "the red Brick road" because I thought people would just seen the part2 and know....

a nice carry on from the first piece...i had to read the first one again to get into this one though...

...once again showing good use of imagery...complemented with substance that rested well against the 'original' story...


.....well, i think that's enough said for now....will be looking for the third piece whenever it's ready...and the fourth....and when all the parts are done, i can give a more extensive 'review' of the piece(s)....

....respect...