lol.....this is a real soft ass beat dawg.....the intro of beat jus made me think of a whiney r&b singer.....but its tight tho lol....good idea opening wit hook.....opening wasn't bad...if u had sum back vocals it woulda really brought hook out...first verse flow was decent but again ya breathe control came into play.....u prolly shoulda wrote ya breathes in an stopped certain bars short an echoed the end words over the breathe....it woulda made flow so much smoother......second verse same feed a first....however delivery is koo....laidback in a soft voice...it fits beat...kinda singy approaoch def good idea..emotion was decent.....jus la ked variation it was same emotion thru whole song...woulda like a Heightened part word u took the intensity up while still maintaining same emotion that would made song better if it went up an down like that.......but overall not bad jus coulda used sum polish.........1

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aiight shit's tight man. love this beat.... You got the good flow on it. improving every song. good shit man. Liking the lyrics too. Quality could be upped, but everyone could up their quality. lol hook is just illness... good story. flow nice and smooth. keep it up man. Nice track by you. 9/10.... stay up. pc.

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