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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

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Wednesday Night: Showcase 1 bar


I think I am supposed to drop first?

your correct. however, If he needs to drop early.
and drops both bars. that is allowed.

and bein that he posted already, i erased the post, and edited into his 1st one.

So both bars have been dropped, just waitin on you.

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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

Last week boberric fell to me, bitch died before I hit her,
And now I'm about to take top off quicker than a stripper.
Say you'll Showcase the door, that won't send me running dude,
Cause if you threw me through, I'll land soft...kinda like your punches do!

top:
Model house entrances, is alot like servin you..I'll bruise n' scare
I'll 'showcase' the door..right after I send him flying through there
^concept was neat. punch itselft was decent. not that hard hitting. 2/5
I'll shred ya to pieces n' place u in a 'basket,balled' and tore up
cuz I'm smashin S.C. to the ground like he fell to the 'floor duh'..
^this wasnt all that good. wasnt feeling it that much. weak concept. punch was blah. 1/5

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show:
Last week boberric fell to me, bitch died before I hit her,
And now I'm about to take top off quicker than a stripper.
^damn. great concept. wording was alright. punch was direct. 2.5/5
Say you'll Showcase the door, that won't send me running dude,
Cause if you threw me through, I'll land soft...kinda like your punches do!
^haha. this was kinda played but seeing as you flipped his concept it came out better. 2/5





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Top-your 1st punch was straight. the overall concept was a bit fresh. wording was nice as well. The total harshness was ok. 2nd punch, was a bit too forced, but the wordplay and concept of the punch definately showed potential in you. I just wouldn't never end a punch in duh. that makes it more of a statement rather than a punch


Show-not some of your strongest punches. These in my opinion weren't actually worded that great at all. 1st line was played, but once again had your twist on it, which made it fresh. 2nd punch was again played, but you worded it the best...


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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

Model house entrances, is alot like servin you..I'll bruise n' scare
I'll 'showcase' the door..right after I send him flying through there
ehhh wording hurt..
I'll shred ya to pieces n' place u in a 'basket,balled' and tore up
cuz I'm smashin S.C. to the ground like he fell to the 'floor duh'..
no


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Last week boberric fell to me, bitch died before I hit her,
And now I'm about to take top off quicker than a stripper.
ok
Say you'll Showcase the door, that won't send me running dude,
Cause if you threw me through, I'll land soft...kinda like your punches do!
cool



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