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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

check. g'luck
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Wow thats your punch? Well fuck you yo.. listen bitch, ima own this
I'm not mad at you.. i'm mad at stubbs for giving me this wack ass opponent
you suck, I have so many lines I could write a book in fact
we all get a kick out of your verse, cuase your punches aint worth looking at

http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3164386
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3164388
http://community.rapverse.com/showt...d=1#post3164390

Fixed.

Lets get this movin.

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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

Still usin statements i see.....

Let’s take this back to lit. class, now look dip shit
If you’re a pro, there MUST be 40 cons along w/ it
I know yal lovin it too. Been sooo long n u still cant rap
On the road to greatness but followed an outdated map

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Kid


Wow thats your punch? Well fuck you yo.. listen bitch, ima own this
I'm not mad at you.. i'm mad at stubbs for giving me this wack ass opponent
Eh, this was weak.
you suck, I have so many lines I could write a book in fact
we all get a kick out of your verse, cuase your punches aint worth looking at
Not much better,


Overall Tony's right. These are both statements. nice rhyme scheme, and potential for dope wordplay, but not punches.


Tony

Let’s take this back to lit. class, now look dip shit
If you’re a pro, there MUST be 40 cons along w/ it
Lol, i liked this.
I know yal lovin it too. Been sooo long n u still cant rap
On the road to greatness but followed an outdated map
Eh, kind of played. Ok.


Overall, ok. Not too harsh, but consistent. possibly lengthen
them up a bit..add a lil more content



V/tony

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Let ME fiiiinnd ooout

Wow thats your punch? Well fuck you yo.. listen bitch, ima own this
I'm not mad at you.. i'm mad at stubbs for giving me this wack ass opponent
this is played, u gotta be a lil more creative
you suck, I have so many lines I could write a book in fact
we all get a kick out of your verse, cuase your punches aint worth looking at
same as above, really just too simple

vs.

Let’s take this back to lit. class, now look dip shit
If you’re a pro, there MUST be 40 cons along w/ it
would be good, but i seen this before
I know yal lovin it too. Been sooo long n u still cant rap
On the road to greatness but followed an outdated map
flip of the concept was too obvious really

Well, nothing that stood out here, but Kid came way too basic with no wit at all so I got Tony here.

Vote - Tony Brown

you suck, I have so many lines I could write a book in fact
we all get a kick out of your verse, cuase your punches aint worth looking at
^^^
i can't think of how to word this a correct way, but this coulda been a real dope line with a better lead and lil better wording

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^^^is that a vote? lol

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