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Chalk Me Up A Win Already, Flow Intell Is Back And Better

Good Luck Tho Tony

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¿Guess Who?

yeah sure...
30 linex max...

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Tony Green checkin whats the topic! g'luck flow!

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Momma strung off crack, daddy been gone for years.
Seem like day after day I shed more and more tears.
Don't talk that much want even eat them frosted flakes.
I'm crying a river like I was Justin Timberlake.
I'm pressured to be cool smoking weed and grey goose.
And I can't think straight I'm failing out of High School.
I have no reason to smile my mans took two to the head.
In this project complex with pee stains on the bed.
Sometimes I think should I just grab the chromed out mack.
I got no reason to live Green gone let his brains splat.
And I can't end up like Bobby Brown turning to the crack.
The stuff that I'm selling I'm startin to snort some of that.
And damn I'm starting to fucking up on my pack money.
I'm tired of standing on the curb selling to these crack dummies.
I'm depressed as fuck Tony aint feeling to hot.
I wanna go into the clouds and meet biggie and pac.
I wanna have a conversation with Marvin Gaye.
I wanna see Rick James and hear those famous words he say.(I'M RICK JAMES BITCH!)
I wanna see Moses read the 10 commandments and look at Jesus.
I wanna say you are my god a yes I will please ya.
So I'm ready to go which day gone be my day.
Cause Green depressed ready to fly like Sugar Ray.

Livin on this Earth aint shit , life is a bitch, depression got me fallin and the ground I'm bout to hit.
Cause I'm tired of this shit my world aint right, I'm ah see you all livin in the after life.

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Momma strung off crack, daddy been gone for years.
Seem like day after day I shed more and more tears.
Don't talk that much want even eat them frosted flakes.
I'm crying a river like I was Justin Timberlake.
I'm pressured to be cool smoking weed and grey goose.
And I can't think straight I'm failing out of High School.
I have no reason to smile my mans took two to the head.
In this project complex with pee stains on the bed.
Sometimes I think should I just grab the chromed out mack.
I got no reason to live Green gone let his brains splat.
And I can't end up like Bobby Brown turning to the crack.
The stuff that I'm selling I'm startin to snort some of that.
And damn I'm starting to fucking up on my pack money.
I'm tired of standing on the curb selling to these crack dummies.
I'm depressed as fuck Tony aint feeling to hot.
I wanna go into the clouds and meet biggie and pac.
I wanna have a conversation with Marvin Gaye.
I wanna see Rick James and hear those famous words he say.(I'M RICK JAMES BITCH!)
I wanna see Moses read the 10 commandments and look at Jesus.
I wanna say you are my god a yes I will please ya.
So I'm ready to go which day gone be my day.
Cause Green depressed ready to fly like Sugar Ray.

Livin on this Earth aint shit , life is a bitch, depression got me fallin and the ground I'm bout to hit.
Cause I'm tired of this shit my world aint right, I'm ah see you all livin in the after life.
Cause the lord is my shepard I aint scared of this.
I'm bout to end it now momma give me one last kiss.
Cause I'm tired of the hood life, looking for that good life.
So its gone get better if I'm sleepin in the clouds right.
So this my last saying I'm leaving yall this message.
Another nigga gone cause of the hood and depression!

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Can you delete one of those posts dabatos so this thread isnt as clogged and all the other posts that werent a check in or a verse thank you.

Depression:


It was a mildly warm but foggy day, Dew fresh on the grass
Cash home from school early and threw my test in the trash
Another bad grade in school, Another beating that i'll wear
And it seems like everything, Is another reason to free a tear
My mother passed away, And for 10 years i have missed her
Wasnt at the funeral, To depressed to get down and kiss her
Decided death was the only option, but failed a suicide attempt
But still the only emotions i felt were unhappiness and neglect
The second try i got the depresssion was too much to handle
It seemed my life was moving slower than wax from a candle
For too long I've been living a life of misery, My strife is history
So i grab the knife blissfully, At first it slices, Then kisses me

...............

But it was too much, only tears of pain, So I screamed for help
I yelled at depression, Cuz it took me away from my dream itself
But i was stingy, So in greed i knelt, Praying for bliss in vain
Alas i wish away the pain..Quickly.. As my wrists now drain
There's nothing i can do, Just kneel and let my life drift away slowly
And wait for that day, When my mother has the chance to hold me

...............

Then i wake up from the dream where depression had me tight
And realized that dream is a reality of my deep feelings at night
Depression is a disease and it can take away the passion of life
It puts you in the mood where you're begging.... Asking to die!!
It did that to me but i never woke up, Just screamed to sleep
Even i could'nt continue on with life, so i dreamed and weeped
They didnt find a trace of dust, As i gripped and faced the rust
Of the sharp end of the knife, And fearlessly laced my trust
I grabbed my wrist with the knife in it, And i held it tight
And began praying that it was right for me to die tonight

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wow.. this was a nice piece flow.. ughh tony green.. i really have no idea what your doing in a topical tourney cause you need elevation bad... Flow you came hard the whole way thru and nice emotion.. you definitely have a great chance of winning this whole thing... but your emotion and vocabulary is what one you this battle.. next time throw some more imagery in there.. pz..v/flow intell

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yea im tryin to work on the imagery thats always been my biggest flaw but thx for feedback

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RV's Only 3 Time Topical Tourney Champion

wow.. flow intelligent.. very nice verse man, i really liked it, You have good emotion, but not enough imagery as said above, but i liked your verse, i could feel what you were feeling well what that person is feeling lol. Your vocab is okay, but I think you can do better, but as for reading your verse for the first time, im pretty impressed. Man all i could do is admitt your better then me . LoL, wonder if we gonna battle.

Tony.. Dude? You verse was okay, i liked that one line Justin Timberlake crying thing, that was a good metaphor or what ever you call it, but I liked it alot.. sadly, thast the only line I liked, your whole topical lacked emotion, imagery, and vocab, so basicly work on those three topics I gave you okay? good job though, pretty good, but i'd say average.

Vote: Flow

Please Everyone Vote On Two Other Battles And Post Your Links Here, Or You will not continue onto the next round, I don't care if you won, you loose if you don't continue onto the next round and the other person will that you lost to. Thank you very much. Wun..
-I. Mind

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#1: http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?p=2024930

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TheFlowIsSick - Loved the verse. It had allright imagery, could have done better but was still pretty good. You stayed on topic perfectly. The flow and the vocabulary was excellent. Some good multies in your verse which was well structured as well. You made a really good verse here.

For too long I've been living a life of misery, My strife is history
So i grab the knife blissfully, At first it slices, Then kisses me

^ I loved those 2 lines.

Tony Green - I'm guessing that you are just starting to get into topicals. Your verse was very basic and could use a lot of elevation. Your structure was kind of off in parts too. The vocabulary was basic, and there wasn't much imagery either. Some attempts a good ideas, but you need to elevate at topicals.

I wanna have a conversation with Marvin Gaye.
I wanna see Rick James and hear those famous words he say.(I'M RICK JAMES BITCH!)

^ Not feeling that at all man. Know what I mean, not really mood setting or anything.

Vote: TheFlowIsSick

Yeah this was actually Tony Green's first ever topical battle! But I think I did good for this to be my first one but iight good job Flow made props!

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