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Old 10-24-06, 10:53 PM   #1
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"Lifes a Dice Game"

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Lifes a dice game snake eyes to the loser/
but im shootin 7 on the comeout like im holding a ruger/
and dont tell me that you dont play no games/
cuz thats like 50 tellin me that he dont say no names/
and we all know what the truth is im ruthless/
and this is a game you gonna end up losing/
see im cruisin down the highway in a 745/
doing bout a buck fifty waitin to buck fifty/
i got that trey five seven by my side/
waitin till the day come when somebody gotta die/
and i aint saying that im untouchable/
cuz if pac and big could get hit then i could to/
this games got me stressed fates got me hexed/
fucking wit my money you know that ive killed for less/
some say that im the next to die/
i say that im the next in line the next to fly/
getting high off that haze blowin smoke to the sky/
watch me write my life down on paper/
you a giant but youll still fall like sky scrapers/
truth be told homie you aint nothing but a hater/
and you can get it now or later or call me the violater/
some call me henessy but you aint nothing but a chaser/
like alize or crystal/
so stop talking like you gangsta you aint holdin no pistals!!

anyone who reads this id apreciate some feedback on that good or bad dont matter i wont hold it against noone
 
Old 10-25-06, 11:23 AM   #2
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this was ok shawty, but you need to tweek ya flow alot. its straight if thats how you like it, but some parts were kinda choppy, and you should work on puttin i n some punches or makin ya rhyme scheme have some multies in it. but keep workin at it shawty..........

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