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Old 01-26-04, 12:02 AM   #1
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N LitEnd (3-0) vs. FuE-Xion (1-0)

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Verses are due Friday 12:00pm CT
Must have post 3 links to votes in your check-in post
For ever link you are missing you get docked a vote
Matches will be closed Sunday night.
 
Old 01-26-04, 12:43 PM   #2
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Old 01-27-04, 12:00 AM   #3
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Old 01-27-04, 06:26 PM   #4
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FuE Undefeated? Wow, Now I’m Truly Astonished
By You Checkin In That I’m Straight…
…Is The Only Thing You’ve Accomplished!
This Battle Is Pointless, Like Me Droppin Hate On You
So Let Me Jump Off My Pedestal, And Land Str8 On You!
Its All Fate Dude, But I Believe We Make Our Own Destiny
But Don’t Test Me…
…Coz I’d Only Ace You & You’d Fulfil Yours By Testing Me!
So Plain To See This Kid Cant Handle Battling Veterans
Aisle’s Right, I Am Rusty…
…But That Means Your Leaving Wit An L And Tetanus!!
& For Fun, Here’s A Little Game With Words:
5 Consonants & 2 Vowels…
…Fuck Off!…
…Coz Not Only We Different Levels, We Different Worlds!
Please Excuse My Structure, I Was Typing This Laughing
…Coz Wen He Claims His Firm Grip…
…For The Text League, We Forgot To Mention No Shafting!
^Call That Line What You Like, My Win Is Inevitable
But When FuE Calls Up His Skills…
…He Keeps Receiving The Same Message…Ineligible!


Drop Early...Preferably When You See This.
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Old 01-28-04, 02:12 AM   #5
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I Admit....Your A Good Topical, But Battling Me??
......You Shoulda Stuck To Sonnets!!!
Cuz The Only Time You Ruin Pretty Records
....Is When Your Featured On It!!
You Suck.....But When Comes To My Dick Ya Cheeks Are Blue!
Your Punches Remind Me......
...Of The First Half In The Name Of Your Crew!
Judging Your AV Pic I Should Kick Your Ass With My Shoe.....
.....And Question Your Computer With A-BOOT!!
Quote:
Oringinally Posted by N LitEnd
12-14?

^^^^^^^^Must Be The Age Limit Allowed In Your Room!
I Went To Search, Typed In Wack.....Page Loaded...
.....Then I Noticed It Was YOU!!
He Begged Me To Be His Ghost Writer Cuz.......
When It Comes To Witty Punches His Mind Is Vacant!
Even Your Location Says Im Beating You Periodically....Its Amazin!!
A Mystik Mind?? Yeah Right!!......Only When Your Gripping Mine!!
*Spraypaints "Fuexion Whored Me" On Cardboard*.....
Here Stand On The Freeway And Hold This Sign!
You Gotta Be Trippin On Stage....I'll Watch This Rusty Vet Fall!
Cuz Fue Winning This Is Like Your Custom Title....
........It ^Says It All^.........

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Old 01-28-04, 02:33 AM   #6
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Damn.. I thought this was a blow out....
Nlitened had a couple nice punches(shafting, Fuck Off)
his flow kind of skipped around... had wordplay
So a pretty decent verse

But Fue-xion..omg... came hard as hell
with his personals and his punches
He twisted every thing about N around
And made it a punch..I liked just about all of em
Tha opener and closer was tight

V/Fue-Xion
 
Old 01-28-04, 09:41 AM   #7
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damn... Fue's closer... whoa...

Damn.. I thought this was a blow out....
Nlitened had a couple nice punches(shafting, Fuck Off)
his flow kind of skipped around... had wordplay
So a pretty decent verse

But Fue-xion..omg... came hard as hell
with his personals and his punches
He twisted every thing about N around
And made it a punch..I liked just about all of em
Tha opener and closer was tight

V/Fue-Xion


actually hate to copy n' paste but shit... he said what I would've... N LitEnd nice fuckin verse... I think you would've had it had you posted 2nd... cause that was fire... who knows... good job...
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Old 01-28-04, 10:24 AM   #8
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Damn, solid battle here. Check my predictions, though I predicted N LiteNd to win, I knew Fue would do good as hell. The punches were there, the wording could have been better. Everything was on target. N Litend, you came decent. Wasn't totally feelin' your verse. Good battle, but FuE gets my vote.

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Old 01-28-04, 04:13 PM   #9
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Hate to go against the grain but I saw a lot of played lines in fue xions verse. Hs closer was the dopest bar of the battle and he had one other bar that stuck out. N LitEnd didn't come played at all from what I read. It may just be me but I think N LitEnd took this one. So.

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Old 01-28-04, 04:21 PM   #10
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Hate to go against the grain but I saw a lot of played lines in fue xions verse. Hs closer was the dopest bar of the battle and he had one other bar that stuck out. N LitEnd didn't come played at all from what I read. It may just be me but I think N LitEnd took this one. So.

Vote: N itEnd


This is the reason I don't battle on this site.. people really don't know how to vote anymore, even mods. Anyway, FuE came harder and with better punches. N LitEnd's verse wasn't bad, it just wasn't as good as FuE's.

Vote - FuE

(BTW, are you an alias of someone? I tried an IP check and couldn't really find anyone I knew.. When you read this, PM me back with who you used to be.. And if you are new... then just tell me that. )
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Old 01-28-04, 06:02 PM   #11
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The closer was a killer...

Fue got this easy.......

N, you had some good punches but they were too short in supply

Fue's verse had me leaning forward to read and shit...

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Old 01-28-04, 07:01 PM   #12
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N Litend

Aisle’s Right, I Am Rusty…
…But That Means Your Leaving Wit An L And Tetanus!!

^Dope

That was the only line N had that I felt shined through. Your verse was packed with tons of weaker punches...but that was the problem, they're weaker punches. You're flow was kinda eh here and there. Not a great verse, but not a horrible one either.

Fue

Cuz The Only Time You Ruin Pretty Records
....Is When Your Featured On It!!

^Nice

Your Punches Remind Me......
...Of The First Half In The Name Of Your Crew!

^Could've used slightly better wording...but dope nonetheless

Even Your Location Says Im Beating You Periodically....Its Amazin!!

^lmao

You had a couple other decent punches, but those were the ones that really stood out to me. Nice flow through it. Consistent with your punches. Definitely a nice addition to the league. Glad to see you're here. I could go into detail, but there's no need. Obvious to me...

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Old 01-30-04, 09:48 PM   #13
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Breakdown of mainly NlitEnd. .

This to me was hard to decide. Being as i can read filler, and I'll get bored after a while, but i hate reading played lines... thats just annoying. NLitEnd, I dunno if you were paying attention to the "battling world" while you were retired from battling, but some of the concepts you used in your punches i have seen before. I will break down this point further:

This Battle Is Pointless, Like Me Droppin Hate On You
So Let Me Jump Off My Pedestal, And Land Str8 On You!

& For Fun, Here’s A Little Game With Words:
5 Consonants & 2 Vowels…
…Fuck Off!…
…Coz Not Only We Different Levels, We Different Worlds!


I've seriously heard the "I'm above you" concept used 10 + times. After reading it for the second time, it just gets old.. at this point, I really think people should get original... Iunno if you just didnt see that cuz u dont read battles anymore or what. either way it was played & uninteresting. I suggest to start reading battles, read the ones in Elite, and go to other sites or whatever... and get caught up...on whats played and isnt if ur already not. Played material can really hurt a verse...

I could quote some lines i thought were just blah but I won't. You need to make sure all your lines are punches. And make sure they at least seem witty to you. You cant guarantee they will to everyone else, but at least to you, you must know that it relates to something else, or is in some way a punch or includes wordplay. Oh, you need to improve your wordplay too. See my battle or Lethargic's battle if you want to see what i mean by wordplay. use these tips next week or i'll assume you dont like my advice and in the future i'll be like the other gay voters and say "XXX took this cuz of better punches. vote - XXX." word..

Breakdown of Fue - Xion. . .


Breakdown for Fue- Xion
the opener was pretty nice. congrads on that.
but, why focus on good points ? Praise doesnt build good battling it builds self esteem.

Judging Your AV Pic I Should Kick Your Ass With My Shoe.....
.....And Question Your Computer With A-BOOT!!
a feeble attempt at wordplay. or whatever you want to call it. Yes i understand you used the setup and integrated it into the punchline... but it was still a bad line. Why? Iunno why for sure, impossible to explain.. basically because it was a very simple line, id expect to see it in front lines for real yo.

^^^^^^^^Must Be The Age Limit Allowed In Your Room!
I Went To Search, Typed In Wack.....Page Loaded...
.....Then I Noticed It Was YOU!!

^ the suspence... get rid of it. for a line where the punch was more like filler, all those dots building suspense let me down...made the line worse, not better. if you had a dope punch after it the dots could make it better, otherwise no. Hard to explain why i didnt like the "punch". prolly cuz it really wasnt one. I hope you know what a punch is. if not im not explaining, you should know. all your bars should contain a punch or wordplay.


good lines:

the periodically one, i figured it was another wack line until lethargic quoted it as nice, then i actually read his sig.. and it had dots. that was ctually a pretty good one. my bad i shoulda read it, lo l .

the tetanus line was the battles best .


vote - Fue - Xion.

thats how you vote whiteys.
 
Old 01-31-04, 01:05 AM   #14
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^Thanks For A Little Helpfulness....Periods Are Habit.....Not Suspense Really....And Isnt This Supposed To Be Closed??
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Old 01-31-04, 06:35 AM   #15
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Word...Thanks For That Break Down Feebs...I'll Come More Original Next Week, Didnt Realised I Had Played Lines.

Dope Battle FuE...Exceeded My Expectations.

Oh, At Least My Tetanus Line Was The Battles Best!
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