deadlines:
battles go up monday
check in by wedsday
verses due by thrusday
votes due by sunday
rules:
no dick riding
no crew votes
no freeposting that's what the beef thread is for if you do it here more then three times your dq'd
no feeding off of other guys verse
bar limits:
4 bar min.
16 bar max.

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win loss record 18-19 with 7 k.o's


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Holla at yo boy Checkin in
no disrespect but i guarantee my firstwin against the franchise
see yah on wensday

yo yo this is franchiZe checkin and the only guarantee is that this fool is gonna get slaughtered

check it i've checked in and i dont know if i'll be on 2moro or the day after so i'm gonna spit rite now. this fool cant feed off my verse but even if he cud he wud still lose

Check it as I get ready to spit my fly shit.......................................

I step into this battle throwin beats like I’m Run DMC//
Beatin u to a pulp like I’m Tito Ortiz from tha UFC//
Ure the LostChild and u must have forgot ure way//
U betta get this straight this aint no child’s play//
This will be ure only spit so u betta make it class//
Cuz u’ll be leavin with no votes and my size 12 up ure ass//
I’m Ali, like a butterfly I float, like a bee I sting//
I’ll hit u with 100,000 volts makin u look like Don King//
U can’t rip, its like u got a bad case of lockjaw//
I’ll make this battle one sided like a fat guy on a seesaw//
Me, I’m the Jack Nicklaus of rap, spittin hole in ones on the range//
Ure a ho on the streets, here’s a dollar………where’s my change?//
This battles about 2 end cuz I’m the freestylin dominatrix//
You’s a hop-a-long midget, I’m Neo from the Matrix.//


Thats my shit, cant wait to see childs!!

I cant even wait he disrespected me I got to beat him now



I don't even feel right having to murder this guy
He wanted to win but came up short like Dee-Bo's eye
Claiming he gone put his foot up my ass
He the type go to jail and get rapped like a fag
Betta step yo game up ball to you fall
I'm a drop you quicker than Halle Berrys draws in that movie Monsters Balls
Float like a butterfly, sting like a bee
He scared thats why his bitch ass shaking like Ali
Wanna be G trying to spit at me
I'll leave you laying on the ground like you was touch by preach
I know you reading the flow and don't even feel safe
Yo best bet is to runaway and leave the game like Mase
Beating niggas like you is my only bad habbit
I guaranteed my self a victory, AND LOOK I JUST GOT IT

check half way through of childs spit, he fed off my verse and ripped one of my lines

This is the original line I spat:
I’m Ali, like a butterfly I float, like a bee I sting//

And this is where Child ripped my line:
"Float like a butterfly, sting like a bee
He scared thats why his bitch ass shaking like Ali"

Both guys came with it this time but I think Franchize came a little harder. LostChild started off strong and had me chuckle wit his opener but then he fell off. If he would have stayed on track he might have got this one. Franchize came wit good punches in just about every verse.

Vote- Franchize

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that's not really feeding off your verse it's one line and your winning anyway so i'm not gonna close this but i will vote:

breakdown for franchize:

flow:good job nothing too complex but no off spots 7/10

volcabretty basic it seems like you didn't really seem to try on this one 5/10

punches:nice job here you threw punches almost everyline my fav,"I’ll hit u with 100,000 volts makin u look like Don King//" ha ha ha anyway good job 8/10

overall:20/30

breakdown for lost child:

flow:good flow not quite as good as franchize though 6/10

volcab:alright job still pretty basic though 6/10

punches:a couple of good ones your problem was you didn't throw enough of them my fav line,"He wanted to win but came up short like Dee-Bo's eye" 7/10

overall:19/30

vote--franchize gets the win better punches

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win loss record 18-19 with 7 k.o's


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vote franchise he came more creative and his ounches hit harder
both need to work on personals and vocab
and yo that kid tottally fed read it un til u get it
child is basically sayin u can float like a butterfly u can sting like a bee
i allready got u scared thats y u shakin like ali

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Franchise takes this one hands down, betta metta's punches opener, and personals. And yes that is feeding off your lines, which is kinda funny cause it was stated right at the top NO FEEDING he musta been hungry, anyways...

FRANCHIZE takes this for me... better punches, I loved, and I say love with love... I loved this punch


Me, I’m the Jack Nicklaus of rap, spittin hole in ones on the range//
Ure a ho on the streets, here’s a dollar………where’s my change?//

Overall Franchize had better flow, better rhymes and better punches...


Lost child - good good dude, but you didnt have as much strong punches as Franchize and nothing of urs stood out as anything to me...

So, franchize takes it for better punches and flow, both y'all had ok vocab, but not great...


PLS return the favour at vote when and if CakeKiller gets his ass together in my battle

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Franchise you got it But it ain't over yet

I felt like I had you but

people say I didn't

But whats real cuz when I'm gone see that rematch

thats right I'm calling the franchise out

This was one of the weakest fuckin battles I ever seen
but I say Franchise got this
he came LESS weak
with less weak punches and all that other bullshit
Lost's shit was too..elementery
too oridanry

good battle...some original shit...i enjoyed it alot....

okay this is my break down

I step into this battle throwin beats like I’m Run DMC//
Beatin u to a pulp like I’m Tito Ortiz from tha UFC//
9 nice opener...the only thing is lot's of people don't watch wrestlin...including me...soit took a second for me to get it
Ure the LostChild and u must have forgot ure way//
U betta get this straight this aint no child’s play//
7 decent...not original but fine
This will be ure only spit so u betta make it class//
Cuz u’ll be leavin with no votes and my size 12 up ure ass//
7 decent...but not really a punch or personal
I’m Ali, like a butterfly I float, like a bee I sting//
I’ll hit u with 100,000 volts makin u look like Don King//
10 tight...good liine....hahahhahahahaha
U can’t rip, its like u got a bad case of lockjaw//
I’ll make this battle one sided like a fat guy on a seesaw//
8.5 funny, not really original...but well written
Me, I’m the Jack Nicklaus of rap, spittin hole in ones on the range//
Ure a ho on the streets, here’s a dollar………where’s my change?//
8.5 ahhah...funny shit dog
This battles about 2 end cuz I’m the freestylin dominatrix//
You’s a hop-a-long midget, I’m Neo from the Matrix.//
4 boo,, bad finisher...so played...but good shit




and now for lost childs

I don't even feel right having to murder this guy
He wanted to win but came up short like Dee-Bo's eye
8.5 tight nice opener...
Claiming he gone put his foot up my ass
He the type go to jail and get rapped like a fag
5 you can't spit shit against his....
Betta step yo game up ball to you fall
I'm a drop you quicker than Halle Berrys draws in that movie Monsters Balls
8 great line...just bad structure...tight though
Float like a butterfly, sting like a bee
He scared thats why his bitch ass shaking like Ali
5 again you can't spit shit against his...it's in the rules
Wanna be G trying to spit at me
I'll leave you laying on the ground like you was touch by preach
7 good...but not great
I know you reading the flow and don't even feel safe
Yo best bet is to runaway and leave the game like Mase
9 haha that's good...
Beating niggas like you is my only bad habbit
I guaranteed my self a victory, AND LOOK I JUST GOT IT
7 decent...common though step up


and now for the totals

franchize....(54/70) tight battle...your better then your record...

lost child....(50/70) some good shit...but also some bad shit...

good battle

v- franchize

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