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Old 07-10-04, 04:10 PM   #1
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*Smile*

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*Smile (The Eyes Of A Young African Teenager)*

(Inspired by everyone having rough times......)
(title Inspired by a lot of people....)

everyday I have a excruciating struggle in life and at school~
I live in a all-white community and discriminating me is the rule~
so once I wake up I put on my eye-liner and my favourite lipstick~
I try to put a *smile* on my face and think of the true politics~
Mr. Mandela, Ms. Parks both overcame the hate in they lives~
pain, anger and other things pile up in my brain's archives~
*school bus comes* I get on and people stare ... Am I different?~
it's like they never saw a African before...Was I born a accident?~
I arrived at school and made my way to physical education~
last pick on a team...no one likes me thats a big complication~
I get shoved to the floor and they calling me a porch monkey~
then call me a illiterate and I say "fuck it" cuz I'm not a monkey~
after that class time went by so quickly then school finally ends~
after this day resided I lost all my remaining goddamn confidence~
that very night I cried myself to sleep in the fuckin' darkness~
in my dreams my mental suffering fades away in evanesce~
while still in my dream I see my ancestors farming on their land~
but than a KKK member came struck them no time to understand~
right before my relative died I swear he looked straight at my face~
and mouthed the words "fight for your rights don't be a disgrace"~
a split second later I woke up.....and inside I contained a lions pride~
and I shouted " respect my entire race let that be known worldwide~



^^^wow I put emotion in there so I need no hate............................
and to all the white people on this site don't take this offensive.........
I wasn't saying that all white people are like that I know there
are nice people of that race & I respect that and if you do take
that offensively Im sorry for the misunderstanding.......................

and people note I'm not African/Jamaican...........
and also this was made because I wanted to do a topical on this
and I wrote this right now since no one will accept my bitchslapped
threads at all............................................... ...............

(NOTE: This was originally posted in Open Mic but it only got
2 replies so I am trying my chances on poetic stuff.........)

(ALSO I AM NOT A GIRL!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!)

!~rate it~! __/10
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Old 07-10-04, 04:31 PM   #2
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nice nice
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Old 07-11-04, 11:01 PM   #3
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uppin.....need more feedback people...........................
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Old 07-11-04, 11:24 PM   #4
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good shit man i liked it

forsaken comen str8 outta canada lol jp good shit
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Old 07-11-04, 11:34 PM   #5
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no thank you's????
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Old 07-11-04, 11:35 PM   #6
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fine be that way haha jp yo forsaken u in tha tag tourny??
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Old 07-11-04, 11:51 PM   #7
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^^^THANK YOU HOMEY!!!!!

and no I'm not in the tag tourney but im in the punchline league!!!!!!!!!

and Canada rules!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! reppin' my country to the fullest peeps!~
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Old 07-12-04, 02:56 AM   #8
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damn...most def feelin dis...hott...and deep a hell of alot of emotion in dis...keep it comin...peace
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Old 07-12-04, 03:20 AM   #9
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this is hot and true shows a lot of emotions i give it a hundred percent
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Old 07-12-04, 07:44 PM   #10
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^^^thanks to you both...if ya like it so much nominate me!!!!!!!!!!!!
for best poet of july!!!!!!!!!!!!!

http://community.rapbattles.com/showthread.php?t=133865
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Old 07-12-04, 09:18 PM   #11
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i like it, forsaken, u get props cuz i ain't a poet fa shit but when u speak ya heart it comes out as poetry..
i was feelin' that seriously.. forsaken,
~wun~
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Old 07-12-04, 10:56 PM   #12
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^^^ I was typing from the heart fasho I respect everybody
who don't talk shit for no apparent reason!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Thanks for the feedback!
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Old 07-13-04, 08:39 PM   #13
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uppin 4 some feedback people!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Old 07-14-04, 10:37 PM   #14
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das deep i liked it cuz u put a hell of alot of emotion into this piece tite 1
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Old 07-16-04, 02:02 AM   #15
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that i an amazing poem i really enjoyed reading it keep up the good work boi
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