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Old 10-17-04, 05:04 PM   #1
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3rdShift 'vs' Premanition

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Old 10-18-04, 12:07 PM   #2
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word

check....gud luck dawg....

peace

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=155798
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Old 10-18-04, 12:08 PM   #3
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aite check check im here......g'luck i think this is round 3 for us aint it
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Old 10-19-04, 02:16 PM   #4
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im mic-wrecker from way back
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Old 10-19-04, 02:28 PM   #5
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even if you regurgitated brocoli on wax ya records still wuldnt b ill
da only way u'll c an MC wit skill is if i was in front of ya an slapped yo grill
i already squashed yu once it seems like you dont learn from defeat
so i should kick in ya teeth with my sneaks to yo prohibit ya speech
but 3rd times the charm right maybe you'll sneak in a win
BITCH PLEASE that's like Bush n Kerry blowin da race an Nader stealin da win
or a crackhead defyin the odds livin after he OD
preminition in laymes terms YOU HAVE NO CHANCE OF BEATIN ME!!!
a white flag should be all you wave forget holdin on to ya foolish pride
blind to ya demise yu spittin in this tourney is like committin suicide
or rappin utterly tounge tied an chokin to death on ya own saliva
pussies got 9 men got 1 life so that x-plains how u a surviva
i work 360 degrees around you try to get a clear shot
i spit circles around you nigga the truth is that im hott an yu nott
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Old 10-20-04, 03:00 PM   #6
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claims knowledge 2 hip hop yet questions if ja's hot or not?...(1)
u talk alot but turn away the challenge if its not from ur 'spot'...(2)
examin ur defeats see theres plenty to even ur wins at twenty...
awareness must be empty cos that ain't flowin wiv barz so lengthy...
beta than you? even ya 'dumb' avatar ‘noddin’ the answer too...
no punches puttin bricks on ya fists n u stil don’t follow through…
3rd how you gonna post threads that ya mouths contradictin?…(3)
not normal 2 follow instructions but I’ll do wot peeps predictin…
since ur shadowed arrival you’ll find u’ve always bin behind…
fuck bein out of ur league………..you were out of ur ‘mynd’...(4)


1 – http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=153780
2 – http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=146410
3 – http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=153777
4 – http://community.rapverse.com/showt...857#post1197857

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Old 10-20-04, 03:17 PM   #7
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lame.........
uppin this rite here
im salty u had to go all the way back to febuary to pull a personal
y didnt u pull the thread of me beatin u....
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Old 10-20-04, 03:19 PM   #8
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lol

someones worried....lol

u can try to sway but you just got owned...

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not worried at all......
who am i swayin???
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Old 10-20-04, 04:05 PM   #10
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smeh, im dissapointed.

V/prem

3rd had streched bars and played/non punches and so did prem, but prems came with a little more originality i guess, even though having to go through those links was a pain in the ass. so yea he got vote for more originality.
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Old 10-21-04, 12:13 PM   #11
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Vote/Premanition
Aight 3rd your lines were too streched and i really wasnt feeling it you had good Vocab and wordplay but they where combined too basic if u know what i mean...You had a meta which didnt make alot of sense..lol...Ur structure looked kinda rushed...

Premanition you had simple Punches which hit..but not very hard..Your sructure was much easier to follow than 3rd's and the flow was better....You kept even lines & bars..6/10 for ya opener...Ya closer was quite good 8/10....But u clinched this with better Structure Flow and Punches Close battle....Return the votes No hate...
 
Old 10-21-04, 12:44 PM   #12
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Emcee:3rd-shift

Verse:
even if you regurgitated brocoli on wax ya records still wuldnt b ill
da only way u'll c an MC wit skill is if i was in front of ya an slapped yo grill
i already squashed yu once it seems like you dont learn from defeat
so i should kick in ya teeth with my sneaks to yo prohibit ya speech
but 3rd times the charm right maybe you'll sneak in a win
BITCH PLEASE that's like Bush n Kerry blowin da race an Nader stealin da win
or a crackhead defyin the odds livin after he OD
preminition in laymes terms YOU HAVE NO CHANCE OF BEATIN ME!!!
a white flag should be all you wave forget holdin on to ya foolish pride
blind to ya demise yu spittin in this tourney is like committin suicide
or rappin utterly tounge tied an chokin to death on ya own saliva
pussies got 9 men got 1 life so that x-plains how u a surviva
i work 360 degrees around you try to get a clear shot
i spit circles around you nigga the truth is that im hott an yu nott

Comments:aight....i wasnt really feelin ya verse...as everyone else said it was a lil stretched and you had som vocab in ther too...nothin really much to say but you lost this one...

Marks:
Wordplay - 5/10
Metas - 6/10
Vocabulary - 7/10
Structure - 4/10
Punches - 5/10
Opener - 4/10
Closer – 6/10
Personals – 5/10
Enjoyment – 4/10
Creativity - 6/10
Overall - 52/100
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Emcee:Premanition

Verse:
claims knowledge 2 hip hop yet questions if ja's hot or not?...(1)
u talk alot but turn away the challenge if its not from ur 'spot'...(2)
examin ur defeats see theres plenty to even ur wins at twenty...
awareness must be empty cos that ain't flowin wiv barz so lengthy...
beta than you? even ya 'dumb' avatar ‘noddin’ the answer too...
no punches puttin bricks on ya fists n u stil don’t follow through…
3rd how you gonna post threads that ya mouths contradictin?…(3)
not normal 2 follow instructions but I’ll do wot peeps predictin…
since ur shadowed arrival you’ll find u’ve always bin behind…
fuck bein out of ur league………..you were out of ur ‘mynd’...(4)

Comments:um..i think that you took this with harder punches and better metas...and your structure was neater and more legible as well..

Marks:
Wordplay - 6/10
Metas - 7/10
Vocabulary - 6/10
Structure - 7/10
Punches - 6/10
Opener - 6/10
Closer – 6/10
Personals – 7/10
Enjoyment – 6/10
Creativity - 5/10
Overall - 62/100
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Old 10-21-04, 12:46 PM   #13
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blah thanx for the votes didnt come hard here but didnt need to....

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Old 10-21-04, 12:48 PM   #14
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even if you regurgitated brocoli on wax ya records still wuldnt b ill
da only way u'll c an MC wit skill is if i was in front of ya an slapped yo grill
naww.. stretched like and elastic.
i already squashed yu once it seems like you dont learn from defeat
so i should kick in ya teeth with my sneaks to yo prohibit ya speech
no no no..
but 3rd times the charm right maybe you'll sneak in a win
BITCH PLEASE that's like Bush n Kerry blowin da race an Nader stealin da win
coulda been decent if worded better.
or a crackhead defyin the odds livin after he OD
preminition in laymes terms YOU HAVE NO CHANCE OF BEATIN ME!!!
LAME
a white flag should be all you wave forget holdin on to ya foolish pride
blind to ya demise yu spittin in this tourney is like committin suicide
not feeling this either.
or rappin utterly tounge tied an chokin to death on ya own saliva
pussies got 9 men got 1 life so that x-plains how u a surviva
prolly the only bars i liked of your verse.
i work 360 degrees around you try to get a clear shot
i spit circles around you nigga the truth is that im hott an yu nott
weak close.

verse was dry, stretched bars flow was very iffy.
mostly played concepts or attempts at weak ones.
nothin stood out in the verse to me at all.
really gotta work on the wording.

Premanition
claims knowledge 2 hip hop yet questions if ja's hot or not?...(1)
u talk alot but turn away the challenge if its not from ur 'spot'...(2)
ehhh..
examin ur defeats see theres plenty to even ur wins at twenty...
awareness must be empty cos that ain't flowin wiv barz so lengthy...
liked the second line cause its true.
beta than you? even ya 'dumb' avatar ‘noddin’ the answer too...
no punches puttin bricks on ya fists n u stil don’t follow through…
not feelin in.
3rd how you gonna post threads that ya mouths contradictin?…(3)
not normal 2 follow instructions but I’ll do wot peeps predictin…
ehh.
since ur shadowed arrival you’ll find u’ve always bin behind…
fuck bein out of ur league………..you were out of ur ‘mynd’...(4)
best bar of the battle.

verse was ehh.
nothin great came with the odd played concept.
had the best bar of the battle which was the close,
also liked the lengthy bars line.

v/Premanition
had the better verse.
had the better punches
structure was good too.
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Old 10-21-04, 11:17 PM   #15
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even if you regurgitated brocoli on wax ya records still wuldnt b ill
da only way u'll c an MC wit skill is if i was in front of ya an slapped yo grill
Weak Intro
i already squashed yu once it seems like you dont learn from defeat
so i should kick in ya teeth with my sneaks to yo prohibit ya speech
HAHAHA, nice line, flow was a bit off though
but 3rd times the charm right maybe you'll sneak in a win
BITCH PLEASE that's like Bush n Kerry blowin da race an Nader stealin da win
Ryming win with win, naaaa, flow was crook aswell
or a crackhead defyin the odds livin after he OD
preminition in laymes terms YOU HAVE NO CHANCE OF BEATIN ME!!!
MMMMM, not bad, average punch
a white flag should be all you wave forget holdin on to ya foolish pride
blind to ya demise yu spittin in this tourney is like committin suicide
Naaa, weak punch
or rappin utterly tounge tied an chokin to death on ya own saliva
pussies got 9 men got 1 life so that x-plains how u a surviva
Average punch, not bad, god idea, needed better execution
i work 360 degrees around you try to get a clear shot
i spit circles around you nigga the truth is that im hott an yu nott
Na weak closer

Overall didnt like ya verse mate, punches were a bit weak and it was a bit boring

claims knowledge 2 hip hop yet questions if ja's hot or not?...(1)
u talk alot but turn away the challenge if its not from ur 'spot'...(2)
Nice intro
examin ur defeats see theres plenty to even ur wins at twenty...
awareness must be empty cos that ain't flowin wiv barz so lengthy...
HAHA, nice multies and funny punch
beta than you? even ya 'dumb' avatar ‘noddin’ the answer too...
no punches puttin bricks on ya fists n u stil don’t follow through…
Weakish punch
3rd how you gonna post threads that ya mouths contradictin?…(3)
not normal 2 follow instructions but I’ll do wot peeps predictin…
Ha, nice!!
since ur shadowed arrival you’ll find u’ve always bin behind…
fuck bein out of ur league………..you were out of ur ‘mynd’...(4)
HAHAHA, very nice closer!

Vote goes to preminition, much better verse here!! Punches were Better and your verse didnt put me to sleep it had me reading! Good job man!
 
 


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