Well if thats the truth set it up than ill make a mockery of you and of rv for thinkin your good

iight you set it up.

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didnt you just read that i dont have any more credits the last time i checked i can set anythingup so you go ahead

I don't got credits. When you get the credits then you can talk shit.

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alright thee guy igot it set up lets go ha ha ha ....

wtf is osris or how ever you spell the gay name...wtf is he talking about....legends i aint no legend....wtf....it might say legendary in my user thing but shit its jsut cuz ive been here for awhile...lmao

and osisris i would merk you so such your mouth...but i quit text its all topicals now but uppin

-Parallel

Uppyn this open mic ya'll.

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Uppyn this dammit.

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upp'n you stupid faggots.

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This is a different ball game nigka and you should bounce right off the court
Your supposed to be dead its no wonder why ya dad didn’t pay child support
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I was tryna figure were you used that line, I like it. as an opener it is strong,brought my attention up, I didnt read ti then be like.......blah this is gonna be boring.

You’re still alive I guess ur mom was so hooked on my dick she forgot to abort
No musical talent is wif you even playing the guitar is ya very last resort…
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not a strong diss on the grounds of , the guiter is dope man. lol.
but yeh this isnt the best bar.

I mean ya fake posing ass wouldn’t know real talent if it kissed you in the face
You’re a mutha fucking foreigner and I don’t feel digust for you cuz of ya race
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This is still flowing well, but once again this sint realy a strong diss,using a similie would of gone well here.

You hate you fake and made a big mistake and I can’t relate when you call me fake
Face it nigka your B4L bullshit beats are too basic, getting pussy on face-pic
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medium diss, the rhyme scheme change's int his bar,so it kinda messes the flow, but not much. rhyme's are ok,could of been alot stronger.

You’re too small to notice little kid and you get kicked out on the fucking streets
Now see I didn’t even have to endeavor to beat you I just did being discreet
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ok closure, but again you could of come alot stronger.


try using metaphor's adn simlie's to get the reader thinking. A good peice is when some1 read's a punch or a diss and may have to stop, put two and two together then be like, ohhhhh. feel me?

also bring your technicallity up in your rhyme's.

flow is good, no stretched bar's, just one change of rhyme scheme were I pointed out.


parrelel im not gonna break your verse down, only done legend's cause he asked me.

But your's is dope aswell. keep dropping.

who the fuck is scarfacexxl anyway?

I forgot. Some gay fuck messing around wif himself on the internet. lol. Thanx for the feed fam.

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yea lol thanks fi del but yea scareface hes kinda a chince lmao

Scarface XXL is the coolest guy you'll ever meet...
Oh man... I'm so scared right now.. Some dude dissed me on the internet, you made me soil myself...
You guys are a couple of jokes.. Parallel, I don't even know you, so why are you even talking about me... And second of all Legend, the only reason you mad at me is because I exposed the truth about you and your fake girlfriend... Hmm, it seems you guys have little time on your hands so you'll right some gay lines about me? The only reason you don't like me, Is because you want to be just like me.
Losers these days...
By the way...
You guys are the ones giving rap a bad name, reason I stopped listening to it...
Peace out gentlemen.

K first of all lemme get started.. My guitar skills are way better then your rap skills definately.. And my beats are way cooler than yours will every be, you still wont show them to me? why, because they suck..
Calling me a foreigner??? First of all, weak punch, second of all, isn't that a racist remark??
Hmm?
Last of all, Parallel, I have never seen you in my life.. so stop talking about me like you do..
Idiots these days