|
|
|
|
| Phenom | Kingz | Dabatos | TonySelf | Tha Q | Half Breed | Tito | 7th End | RV Radio  |
02-04-05, 05:45 PM
|
#1
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
Love/Confusion/Forgiveness
IP: F968 2C5C
Love What is this im feeling, is it love or more Im not sure if im ready, to walk through that door Somethings not right, Im starting not to care This is messed up, it aint fair I do love her but im not sure if she feels the same I think she hates me, and im startin to feel the same I give up, I don't wana play this game I guess love is both a gift and a curse I still cant believe she broke up with me first Is there still a chance for me and you I hope so, I really do love you Confusion Im confused, I thought we broke up a while ago On the same day of our date, when you were a no show But that was no excuse for me to do what i did I am not sure I wanted our relationship to end I wana be more, I don't wana be your friend I know its over, forward youve moved But Im stuck in the past, Im confused Forgiveness Baby, I wana say Im sorry for everything You know its true, For you I'll do anything I tried seeing other people, It's not for me Im for real, your the only person for me It's like a piece of me is gone, no where to be found Since you left me my life has gone no where but down I love you, i miss you, I need you Please allow me to make it up to you Im gonna get on the floor and plead Please, forgive me Last edited by Life : 02-05-05 at 01:58 PM. |
||||||
 
|
|
|
02-04-05, 06:58 PM
|
#2
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: AB07 3993
upping for positive feedback...............
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-05-05, 01:04 PM
|
#3
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: 99AB 2E38
upping..................
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-05-05, 01:57 PM
|
#4
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: 99AB 2E38
upping............
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-07-05, 05:08 PM
|
#5
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: F968 2C5C
upping............
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-08-05, 04:55 PM
|
#6
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: 427E F503
upping..............
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-11-05, 04:50 PM
|
#7
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: EC23 CBED
upping.................
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-12-05, 11:43 AM
|
#8
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: 6C96 7CBB
uppin//////////////////////
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-12-05, 12:45 PM
|
#9
|
|||||||
|
Banned: Cheating
|
IP: 8A1A D0A3
some great writing, all of us can relate too
flowed well, just improve ur vocab a lil bit |
|||||||
|
|
|
|
02-13-05, 12:49 PM
|
#10
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: 427E F503
^^^thanks.uppin
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-13-05, 02:04 PM
|
#11
|
|||
|
**the council**
|
IP: 73F9 08EE
i think it was pretty good how you divided it into paragraphs and used a different feeling for each.....each feeling was described quite well would have been great if you had come more complex with the vocab that would be somethin to work on overall though....7/10
__________________
  |
|||
|
|
|
02-14-05, 02:28 PM
|
#12
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: 78D5 BEE8
thanks. uppin/////////////
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-15-05, 05:31 PM
|
#13
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: B55E CB36
uppin///////////////////////////////////////////////////////////
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-17-05, 04:18 PM
|
#14
|
||||||
|
-Not On My Level-
|
IP: 596C 2677
uppin............................................. .
|
||||||
|
|
|
|
02-18-05, 05:16 PM
|
#15
|
|||||
|
Banned: Cheating
|
IP: A3EA 639E
it'z sum good shit u wrote i felt it cuz like mc iggy say we've all went thru it keep up the good work & i like the overall quality fo sho
|
|||||
|
|
 |
| Thread Tools | Search this Thread |
| Display Modes | |
|
|
Linear Mode
