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check in now and 30 linex max...

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o yeah checking in.......................................

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LoL word @ this, damn at the topic, but we will see, we will definetly see.

Walking down the streets, beaten, bloody and bruised
What happened, just now, how did I just get fooled….
WHY did they take advantage of me, to make me feel
… make me feel like shit, so they could prove they were real…

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Rambling along a street, by myself, no others with me
It’s raining solid, at least my tears are covered
So no one can see how badly I’m impaired, my heart flees
For so long, my fucking emotions were tethered..
Someone bit into my flesh, and tore around with they teeth
I’m wearing four layers, yet I’ve been arctic forever
No, I can see through everyone, resembling a colossal glass sheet

People believing the infomercials, creating something
completely fictional, left in the abyss, they’re minds stalling
Conform if you will, who cares, when you have a stolen Identity
The medias skill, taking lives of the innocent, fucking brainwashing

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But look what happens, I haven’t talk to god in so long
You become someone who is unknown to society
The Goths are hated, the punks claim to be full of complexity
Are they though? If you don’t do right, it’s automatically wrong..

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Undeniable problems arise from the simplest of things
I wish I could fly, but I’d be called a freak with wings
To soar above the problems that someone like me faces
Having more than one style of living, tied up in a knot, like shoe laces
Refusal to swing just one way, not homosexually, but mentally
My mind is open to more than just one thought, especially
Those of the children who speak in tongues, but the same language
don’t you get it you fools, were all different but we hold the same baggage
God’s light is spreading through the different to show our proud pasts
That’s why I am proud to stand out, and be Jesus’ Outcast.

MiSta_AuTh3nTiQ i thought you get off school early?? Well you have about 7 hours n 30 minutes before deadline

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Bitch Fuck You And Your Fucking Deadline, Lol. I'll Make It. Fucking Herb Mod.



Lol J/k

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VOTE ON ALL ASPECTS (IMAGINARY, EMOTION)

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aight yo this was a good battle. damn u two. made me wait till the tourny to see this battle even though yall been talkin shit to each other for months. lol. any way.

Given Light.
Your verse started off kinda slow and then got up to what u standardly drop. i hate that every other rhyme scheme, just cant get it to flow right in my head, so i just forgot about the fact if it rhymed or not and went soley to the deepness of your words. and there was nothin i could really see goin on there. its like u had the Outcast topic down but i really couldnt see u being an outcast. you just showed that u understood the word very cleary.
but i will say that i loved your ending verse.
favorite line was: Undeniable problems arise from the simplest of things
I wish I could fly, but I’d be called a freak with wings<<<<shit was hella nice.

Mista Authentiq.
you was exactly the opposite of him. but it seemed like yall styles was cloned from one another. lol. but what i mean by opposite is i liked ya beggining a lot then towards the ending i started losing interest. also u made me see the things you would be going through. I hope they were fake. but the whole concept of being a depressed outcast wasthere
Favorite line: just love a men's touch, Hands, Fingers, and lips, but it's the heart that i'm fondly sacred to
The way, that my father treated me, with care, trusting and mostly love i want that from another man<<<<scary but it was my favorite.

Overall.
these verses was exactly the same to me. yall mustve started topicals at the same time or something. GL had more Emotion to me but Mista Authentiq had more imagery. so i look to the topic. and the only reason i'm giving this to Mista is cause he gave details on why he is an outcast. i just like story type topicals. so that may just be me. so...
Vote... Mista Authentiq

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ahhh, this was a close battle.....both, i've seen better, but still not a bad battle

given....i thought you were weak at the start, you had a good idea, i was feeling the intro, great imagery, emotion....but then the middle of your piece wasnt as consistent and i felt you kinda wavered a little, but you picked up again in your last verse, which is what separated you two....i was feeling alot, you had the right amount of vocab which is good, your metaphors really drew nice images to go by, and i thought that was your strongest point....emotion, coulda been better, but still was decent

mista....i thought your approach was too obvious, and i didn't like how you worded alot of your lines, which is what really turned me off from your piece.....you had better emotion, but alot of lines, your vocab kinda ruined your imagery, like repeating words too much kinda weakens your piece....but still not a bad drop

you both had good structure and flow, emotion was about the same....just i felt given's had more imagery and just appealed to me more.....so, my vote goes to...

v/given light

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^^ Omfg Imaginary!?.............are You Fucking Serious?....................

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man, it was a close battle, and thats what i thought it came down to, and that is a big part of writing, and i thought he had more, fuck

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need to re-read that mane...........But w.e...............

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