nice shit both of you vocabulary eh i think lyrcle got it jsut came with better words on this one and the imagery eh tie but if i had to pick it would be sokaris. the emotion had to go to lyricle though cause he expressed things and worded it very well with a better view on things. the structure eh both of you need to work on that really try not to make ie chaotic line the lines up to make it even bars and the sylable count went to lyricle on this one hands down lyricle got this here no doubt keep doing your thing man

sok
not bad stucture is good but you use basic rhymes and you tried to use a different style of poetry i forget what its called but you didnt do it properly the emotion needs work, flow is alright but you need to work on emotion thats important for poetry, the imageyr wasn't to bad but nothing much goin on in ya story, work on that.

Lyrical
better stucture wasn't as good but you have a nice flow, good vocabulary very witty lines some creativty missed in there, some nice metas very good emotion, but what was most shown was imagery nice story good shot man keep it up.

vote/ LyricalSolja

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