It was sorta basic. It would work for a freestyle but when you think it out it has to be more complex. IM ME @ hpedni i'll speed you past a years worth of elivation.

who you think you are comin to face me
you can't embrace me
im the best nex to the greatest t-u-p-a-c
so come on wutchu waitin for bitch amaze me
run up on me strapped with your dads 380
and after this we will see who be pushin up daisies

...there just so its more clear

hpedni for what? i use msn messenger what sorta messeger is that like yahoo or icq or sumthin

Oh I'll just help you on here then. See honestly if you spit that in a freestyle outside it'll work well. Just its different on here I guess. You need complexity.

1st off wordplay is really good. Clice punches or familiar phrases work good sometimes.
Like this:

Clice= weakest link.
Punchline: the URL to your battle is the weakest link.

Shit like that. Take personals to your opponet to.
Diss him with shit specifically for him. His name etc use anything.

With you I can just say "bla you're in my shadow" or "your ranking is after your name".

simple shit like that. PS do NOT battle anyone over 500 posts. THeir simply tryna
get you cause you're new.

what kinda stuff could i say though.. i just... sometimes nothing comes to my mind

meh it comes from practice and having a witty mind. Punchline or basically jokes that rhyme. You need to be smart to be ill with punchlines. Sometimes you get smarter and your rap gets better and sometimes you get smarter from rappin. Meh just read more and develop your own style. Take shit that annoys you or take ANYTHING thats going on and make a comment about it. Only do it with irony or wit. Like I can take something random like shoes. "Everyone got air forces but no one'll join it".
Shit Like that.

something like 'some ppl today are jus full of disgrace like shaq cock smackin dat bitch in the face'

lol shaq's cock smacked a bitch in the face? If so then yeah you got the point.
That's good for writing songs. The best thing to do when you're writing a song is
choose the mood of the song before you write it. Meh you probably got it by now.

ye i heard it was som 19 yr old i dunno... someone told me this but i neva kno these things.. i always had grasped a basic concept but i was never really able to get all high tech with my rhymes

yup well im out anyways its 6:30 am here n i aint got no sleep yet... its like som family reunion tomorrow anyways... ight later man n thx for your help