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09-26-05, 11:37 AM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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Tweety Vs. Atticus
IP: E209 CF04
Verbal Emotions IV
Check in's are due 2 days after the battles are made. (Wednesday) Verses are due 2 days after the check in date. (Friday) Every participant has 2 extensions they can use. Each good for 1-2 days. Voting goes to Sunday at 6 PM EST/ 2 PM PST. Line limit is 20-50 lines. Every participant must vote on a minimum of 3 battles. Please vote on battles that don't have a lot of votes, it doesn't do any good if a battle with 10 votes gets another while one battle has under 2 votes. Topic: Closed Eyes REMEMBER! IF YOU NO SHOW THEN YOUR POSTS WILL BE CUT IN HALF! Good luck 
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09-26-05, 01:47 PM
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IP: 28AD 5545
Mmmmmmmmhm,
Checking In. |
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09-26-05, 03:20 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 97A5 21E4
Chezeck...Ditto.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal:  ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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09-30-05, 03:00 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
Hey, I'm Going To Have To Use One Of My Extension.
But The Problem Is I Wont Be Around Till Monday... Sooo As Unrealistic As That Is I Was Wondering If I Could Get Drop Monday. Im Just Asking You To Cut Me Some Slack, You Can Even Use Both My Extensions For This One Or Something. Cuz If I Can't Get That Then Im Going To Have To No Show. |
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09-30-05, 03:10 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: E209 CF04
lol damn man... if he dont drop than u in.. i guess all u can do is jst hope for him to drop cuz u had 5 days to drop basiclly u know.. it wouldnt really be fair to the others if i give u this extension fam.. just pray that he dont drop lol.. you should understand that man..
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09-30-05, 05:35 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 88AD 4035
OOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO ATTICUS!...you is soooooooo LUCKY!
Lol My high school football game is playing Tonight...RIVALRY!...Yeah Yeah things going cra-z over there... So I'm putting in my 2 days extension in this battle...Drop on Sunday... if you can...Pz
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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10-01-05, 02:01 PM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: F8F5 C3DE
lol... okay... okay okay okay.. all verses for both u guys due monday.. argh... but i guess i'll be the only one to vote.. n who ever i think wins continues lol
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10-03-05, 11:53 AM
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C.hristopher S.ean D.abatos
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IP: E209 CF04
I really do hope you show
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10-03-05, 04:31 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
Got To School... 'The Jock', Care Free.
Greetings Breed This Ego Of Mr. Popularity. Feet Skip Past Girls With A Cocky Swagger, Drag A Scene Behind As All These Calves Herd. I Dance... The Piper, Pipe In Hands, Man Forms To Rat As Four Light Notes Lift Dams. The Flood Gates Break, Just Pump Rain Up. A Sea Of Enslaved People Fills Each Ways Cusp. They Fallow A Step Back, Question's Asked... Left And Right, From The Get Go, To And From Class. Im Idolized Though. My Name's A Grasped Symbol... The Asterisk To This Cold Place's Blackening Whole. *Goes To Class* ...Riiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiiing *Bell Rings And He Leaves Class* Meet Up All My People Just Before Class. A Stunning Little Dime Finds A Comfort In Lap. Bull Shit This Line, "You're Eyes Are Beautiful". She Smiles, I Sigh... In Mind Already Through The Hole. .................................... *Kid Walks By, Accidentally Bumps Someone* "WHAT THE FUCK!?!?! You Fucking Faggot! Cant You Fucking See? That's My Back Bitch." He Smacks The Kids Face, Gets A Laugh In Late. Looks At His Crowd Now For The Packs Embrace. They, All Love It... So Much Higher Ranked. The Kid Had That Shit Just Comin... Guys A Waste. .................................................. .............. This Bitch Is Fucking Gorgeous... High Class Shit. "WHAT THE FUCK!?!?! You Fucking Faggot! Cant You Fucking See? That's My Back Bitch." Glance Over To See My Mans Hand Sweep. Cant Even See, But Here A Smack And Laughs Breach. Everyone Smiles So I Hold No Sign Of My Own. Fallow, Although When I See This Kid I Broke. Never Stopped It, As This Kid Flee'd Weeping... Stared Me Right In The Eyes Before They Shut Out These Things. *The Next Day* Just Another Day, Im Great. Why... Even This Shutter Of Education Is Laid Wide. All Are For Me, Discard He Who Your Sold On, I'm Above All, This Communities Bull God. Not Even Arrogant, See When Its Truth... These Led Title Used Hold No U- *EXPLOSIONS RING OUT!!!!* Cover My Head Up As Rubble Tumble Runs By. Close My Eyes And Hope The Thunder Subsides. *A Kid Kicks Open The Doors And Runs In* The Doors Fly Open, Almost Now Broken. Hinges Dangles As People Race To The Ground Choking. The Debris Seize Every Crevice You Can Imagine. Dirt Sifts Through My Hair As The Air Lands Ravaged. It Sits There... Ripping Its Filthy Claws At My Iris. Driving In This Pain Of Not Saving A Tried Kid. *Gunshots Ring Out/ A Figure Stands At Me* I Cant See, I Think Someone Come Up In Front Of Me. SHIT! I CANT FUCKING SEE! "HELP ME PLEASE!!!" *Figure Speaks...* "So Blind To Me Until The Time Of Need... Now It Is I With Eyes Wide Shut And Blind Prestige." *Closes Eyes... * ...BANG!!! News Reporter: "On a sunny spring day in April 1999, a suburban high school in Jefferson County, Colorado, found itself under attack by two of its own. In less than fifteen minutes of the first-lunch period on that Tuesday, two student gunmen killed 13 and wounded 21 before they turned the guns on themselves - the most devastating school shooting in U.S. history." |
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10-03-05, 05:22 PM
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pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP: EE58 AEAE
^nice piece on columbine Atty........ i was feelin how u separated it into sections; it helped the imagery play out in my head......
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10-03-05, 05:25 PM
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IP: 0825 899A
No Doubt Man, Thanks.
Hopefully It Was Worth The Wait. ... I Feel Like Such A Scrub For Taking Soooo Long. |
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10-03-05, 10:36 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 5CA8 D825
-The Sky-
looking down at this havoc, the fear squeezing me so tight,
in fright "why god didn't do anything?" the outcome isn't bright. darkness corrupting my brain, the ache of pain is what i'm feeing, trap behind illusion bars-mind blocked- the agony of it is screaming. disbelieve what I was sensing, I smelled the blood, scream of breath, stopped- few minutes later I saw that spirit float pass me-signal of death. Heart broked, tears starts to pour-the sun disappears while I express this, scorch of hate punches is being thrown but i couldn't reach the object. The only thing from this point is all i could do was to cry and cry all night, this emotional nauisance turning me so tense as my tears fall from the sky. -The Grass- damn I feel it in the air, tears from above collasping on me, felt the force wind of the door, still in pain from the hard feets. i sense someone in the help of need, but what can myself do?, I'm stuck to the ground, feeling sweaty and smothered by dew. I remember the tickle I felt coursing down my face-so different, is this another living thing that I don't know of, damn what was it? the preasure of that thing turn me upside down, I felt very sadden, then my roots gave me the clear view-it was blood that has fallen. "This is a bad night", hard streak of tires scorching up the road, "there was a bomb here I can feel it, but it already have explode". -The Road-
rubber is in furious, I'm the feeling the heat ontop of my concrete,
rain pouncing above me, like an tatto by the black ink- i'm asteriske. little particles of me is being discrete, why you moving so fast driver?, is it because you witness something that ignite your soul as a lighter? trying to get away from all the problems, but it's hunting and still in your soul, wasn't much of a cure and you had to kill the problems of it all-the core. Are you yearning inside of what you done? Murder your lovely divine rose, the one who thought that cared about you, but tonight you find out that she's a pose. Rain getting heavier "O no..damn" "stop please my back is hurting enough, Pull Over damn it!..The fuck you won't?..Fine then...this is about to get rough" Reporter-A incident has happen here on 41 avenue here in Florida...A Man who caught his wife cheating Killed her and left a note "I'm going away"...He didn't went away too far...the weather lastnight was trechous..Lighting...windy...hard rain and the road was slippery and bumpy...with that he crashed..and died at the scene..* Basically...The bolded words...are object that have no eyes...so..Closed eyes..they only sense..Ditto. G-Luck.....
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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10-04-05, 05:24 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 30D7 E23B
Votes....Shit...
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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10-04-05, 08:02 PM
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Poet's Daughter.
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IP: 30D7 E23B
OMFG...Someone..and I don't want no 1 vote only thing...Anyone can vote fo real.
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mystery Is a Freak!! ITawAPuddyKat: Yeah, I guess. But I won't be a Lesbo for life. Smartone Freal: oh so u DO have plans of turnin str8 ITawAPuddyKat: Well Yes, Yes I do. Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: Lol, all smiles aren't we? Lol Smartone Freal: lol yea i cant hide what i think bout u Smartone Freal: ITawAPuddyKat: ...Oh, what DO you think about me? Lol Smartone Freal: lol sorry thats private ITawAPuddyKat: EWWWWWWW..*Sigged* |
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10-05-05, 04:59 PM
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pain is weakness leaving the body
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IP: EE58 AEAE
wow.......... this was really hard to vote on......... let me break it down:
Atty: broke it down into sections, which i loved...... good structure and interesting point of view..... most people that right about that write from the killer's or innocent bystander's point of view........ vocab iz good........ overall 10/10....... Tweety: girl u know i love u........ this piece iz a good example why...... sorta like with Atty, i liked the way u broke it down into sections...... great structure and very interesting point of view........ vocab iz on point...... wow......... overall 10/10..... voted: Atty........ i'm mad at myself for taking so long to vote, but these are my 2 favorite pieces ever (besides All I Have, link in sig...... hint, hint)...... u both are by far two of the best poets on this site....... it was close bcuz i couldn't find anything wrong with either besides Tweety's typos........ i picked Atty bcuz it was easier for me to see it in my head..... don't know why....... both of u: keep writing....... you're the best at what u do, use it........
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