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11-10-06, 09:05 PM
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The Field
IP: 8189 3023
Great things have happened on the football field.
Its where I've thrown my first pass Its Where I made my first run Its Where I've had my first tackle Its Where My first game was won Its Where I made my first catch Its Where I gained my first yard Its Where I make myself proud Its Where I play with all my heart Its Where I first touched a ball Its Where I met my first team Its Where I had my first coach Its called my field of dreams Also.... Its where my life started Its where I met my first love Its where I had my heart broken Its where me and my love broke up Its where I had my first kiss Its where I had my first hug Its where my life ended Its where everything got tough Its where my life fell apart Its where I had my first loss Its where I broke down Its where my heart stopped |
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11-10-06, 10:06 PM
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IP: 8189 3023
yo ppl read this I worked hard. lol
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11-12-06, 04:00 AM
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Jack The Ripper
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IP: 0AC9 8CAE
lol, that was bad, so keep at it and hope you get better, or stop writing... i'll let you pick
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11-12-06, 07:35 PM
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Human Crack in The Flesh.
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IP: 1125 933A
No Bad as in your a piece of shit.................
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11-12-06, 07:38 PM
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Human Crack in The Flesh.
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IP: 1125 933A
No burn 30,000 leagues under the sea G...See? be,,,,,,,,,
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11-12-06, 07:48 PM
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Put Yo Money On Me
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IP: 97A1 4BD2
That wasn't good, but go out, buy a composition notebook, write all your garbage lines in there, don't show anybody for 2-3 years, and I bet you'll get better!
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11-12-06, 11:02 PM
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Human Crack in The Flesh.
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IP: 1125 933A
Quote:
I agree, Linebacker55 you stupid bitch...
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11-13-06, 01:14 AM
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On The Air - COMIN JAN 07
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IP: 001C 5107
That wasn't bad
this is pretty tight dude..... Its like the way you feel about the football field and M-EAZY why you dissin this dude? lol your hilarious mister "LIL WAYNES THE BEST RAPPER ALIVE" you crack me up |
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03-30-07, 05:59 PM
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IP: 3F9E AEC0
it was weird for me mann, like it wasnt dat tight. ur poem was real simple and yahhh... i dont know just practice dude lolz
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04-02-07, 06:41 PM
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IP: 2D91 EFCB
um. i dont get it. i thought poetry was not supposed to be so damn complex.this poem is in the damn locker room. why isnt it good?!?!?!? fuck?!?!?!
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