Well, you can write that and put it in here if necessary.

It would be like a farewell to LBL, welcome to GBA type of shit. But, I honestly don't think it deserves a magazine.

Maybe you could do a concluding magazine about the LBL in a whole, but not reviewing last week, because last week was FUCKING ASS!

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well, uh, when can i expect to see battles up?

Well, seeing as the votes are in favour of MONDAY as the drop day for verses, battles will be going up on THURSDAY.

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yeah thats what I meant Nick, something about the LBL as a whole...

well, we can put it in here... if it was done in the LBL forum, dudes wouldn't have had enough time to read it.

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im really gonna miss posting in the chat threads there.............
*sheds tear for LBL*

you'll all be shedding tears if you don't go fucking vote on my WBL battle

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i did, you cant be half assing like that Nick
that J-nyce dude is too wack for you to take a loss to him
you shouldve squashed him but i still think you took it
iunno if ima like that league too much if that quoting shitty ass ben wallace and army punches, i might have to sign out soon lmao

lol, i keyed that shit up straight away....

but yo, a lot of punches that don't deserve to be quoted somehow get quoted... kempo gave props to fracture's verse last week that had about 6-7 fat jokes in it... i mean, i love a good fat joke if its funny, but damn... don't overuse shit

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word that whole verse wasnt quote worthy, except the buffer line and another one there, im really not feeling text period anymore, i dont see myself making more than one run there, im just wholly bored of it all
im more interested in the actual chat threads than the battles lately

http://community.rapverse.com/showthread.php?t=239789

^^^ Which one of yall moderators dat dont like me closed dis thread ???? I thought dat was a real positive drop for people to see and the two people dat commented before yall closed it said it was great and it was a 10 ....... Not tryna start no beef, but which one of yall hatin on da kid ?????

^^^ Tell me was wrong with it somebody ....... I jus wanted some feedback ......

word, me either.

i'm a just go on one last run and when i get bored of the run i'm just gonna stop altogether, fuck a break.. just quit and put all my focus into my book.

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I honestly liked it. I did a similar concept a year ago, although mine was more of a comical piece, called "I Wanna Be...".

I felt the concept was decent, it was some real shit and not some made up ass. The real life shit issues and thoughts are whats good right now. A lot of people would be thrown by the whole starting almost every line with the word Imagine. It is pretty necessary for the topic of the overall piece, but a lot of dudes find it annoying reading "imagine" over and over again.

Perhaps, if you took it back and rewrote it, it would be better. Maybe try piecing it together in sections of 4 lines.

Like...

Imagine.............................
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Imagine.............................
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^ see what I mean, dudes might find it more reader friendly then.

Also, drop the // at the end. I get that people use them to break lines apart but it is really not necessary. You break the lines by starting a fresh one, dudes should be able to pick up on the line breaks and rhymes easily. The // just make a piece look annoying now and "herbish". Yes, that is the word people associate those // with.

Overall though, the concept was real, it was dope. The delivery could be a bit better, maybe get a bit more complex in places. I know you are talking real shit and so imagery is not a major issue, but nobody really likes some basic as hell written piece anymore.

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